We took a walk around the field1
finding walking sticks and ant hills2
the sun flowers grew way high this year3
the empty blue skies and the calm breeze of the winds4
We took that walk so far out in the field5
no worry of a God and no worry of a sin6
no worry of a parent and no worry of getting lost7
we took that walk just so we could remember8
As the walk came so long our knees seemed to buckle and ache9
we got tired of the rocks beneath our feet10
as the sun started to poor down in heat we soaked in sweat11
but none of this mattered since we were kids having fun12
Somewhere along that road was a black feather or two13
naturally we picked them up to put in our hair14
as we collected one by one without a care15
not a care in the world where those black feathers came from16
As more and more seemed to pile up along the road17
we guided our eyes once more around the field18
noticing that the greenery started to fade the more we walked out19
with our walking sticks keeping us up on our feet20
we were explorers..so we thought21
There were to many feathers to carry so we thought we'd keep one22
my friend, theres the bird, shall we give them back?23
we threw them feathers around the bird hoping he'd get up and leave24
"get up and take your feathers home bird.."25
Friends die though, lost friends die..26
I stood there waiting and waiting for him to get up27
thought I would help by poking my stick to make sure if he was awake28
"He's dead.." dead, how can you say that?..he just doesn't know how to fly29
my friend walked away in silence to leave me to beg the bird30
found his way home, as I thought I would help the bird31
"my friend left because of you..I just wanted to help, I can teach you!"32
teach him to what? fly? or awake?33
"Look, bird, you have to get up so I can go home!34
I can't just leave you here for the wolves."35
what wolves? you were in your field, field of what..daisies.36
"Look, bird, you have to get up so I can go home!"37
Finally, an eye blinked and noticed the boy38
excitement grew as did the bird got up and fell back down39
squirming around in pain and flies40
"come on, get up" another poke with the stick to motivate it41
"I guess if you won't get up I'll make you"42
the boy took the bird in his hands as more feathers seemed to fall43
as the long journey back home with a reeking bird in his right hand44
he started to ask questions of why the bird couldn't fly45
the more he pondered the more the bird died46
"come on, you have to fly so I can go home!"47
of coarse the boy soon gave up and went home alone 48
with his stick stuck in the ground in shape of a cross..49
Author notes
..sorry that its long but I don't want to shorten it..yeah I'm stubborn when it comes to my poetry
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Comments
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I loved this piece, especially since you used a blackbird reference
. This poem is long yes, but its such a lovely story and you painted the picture out so well for the reader, almost seeing that poor boy talking to the decaying bird. Wonderful job, I really enjoyed this. Bravo!
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this was an awesome write it felt asif i was taken on a journey to that old fimular place of when i was a kid... cept for the black feathers and dead bird... i loved the way the black feathers portrayed something deathly was going to come... i loved this work... as i love all your work... keep on writing! -
Sometimes it's good to be stubborn in poetry. Hehe. Great job with this. Thank you so much for using 'Don't you Know How to Fly?' as your title. For a while there, I didn't think anyone was going to use it - but I'm really happy you did. We thought it would be really interesting to see what people would come up for that, and you did a wonderful job with it. The word usage was a little iffy for awhile as well as the flow, but in the end I think it came out alright. Great idea; it shows your creativity. Good luck in the contest! Thank you SO much for entering!

