Under my crimson smile 4

This could be the end
This could be the sign
This could be the fire
To fuel some satisfaction
Underneath this crimson smile
Can you feel this fear
As it rips through your naked flesh
Penetrating through me again
Take this rejection
Spray me with revenge
I am the toxin in our mind
Like Doctor Jekyll  and Mr Hyde
A psychopath awakened
Fear is sleeping
Right down to bottomless pits we dwell
Living the double life
Inside this mental hell
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  • Bello.Midnight
    September 23

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    ♣ blake

    As it rips through your naked flesh
    Penetrating through me again
    Take this rejection
    Spray me with revenge
    I am the toxin in our mind
    Like Doctor Jekyll and Mr Hyde


    Now baby...
    This was just astounding.
    You got right in their deep with the emotions and the psycopath inside you and I just know every word was enriched with blunt and honest truths within the darkness of your mind, body and soul.

    ♣ blake


  • SeleneStone gold member
    March 17

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    Oh I am loving this!!! My favorite words here are:

    Spray me with revenge
    I am the toxin in our mind

    I love how you have written those lines. The words you are using just blow me away. This is one incredible series of revealing poems and I can't get enough of it! Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! You are so talented in your writing Blair and this is truly amazing dear!
    ~Joann


  • Fizbop Greeters member
    March 16

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    Very fasinating take on this seemlingly endless poem very intresting theme you have here don't really know what else to say.

  • V l
    March 16

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    Spray me with revenge
    I am the toxin in our mind
    Like Doctor Jekyll and Mr Hyde
    Spray me with revenge
    I am the toxin in our mind
    Like Doctor Jekyll and Mr Hyde I just love those lines and these pomes.


  • Siby Anan
    March 16

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    This may have been the best one yet, if I may say so myself.

    I love it so much. A psychopath awakened...wow.

    This poem completely blew me away


  • FantasyFable
    March 16

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    " I am the toxin in our mind, like Doctor Jekyll and Mr Hyde" oh my fucking God that sentence was wicked!! How did you think of that one!! I was well blown away with that one girl well done!! It brought a kinda proud smile to my face how brilliant that rhyme/metaphor was!!! 10/10

    I really think you have done amazingly well with this and show them off on SW with pride my great friend because these are brilliant. Full of detail and emotion and hidden meanings, and the metaphors you have used are just mind bustingly wonderful!

    Well done Blair - love ya babes!! x x x

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