Under my crimson smile 2

It started with a fascination.
A hidden feeling.
Try and stop me, I had screamed.
I wanted to fall to pieces.
So that the devil could pick me up.
I asked God to make me straight.
I begged him to make me something else.
Something I was most defiantly not.
Instead he open the door.
He handed me the worst possible card I could have asked for.
He let me stay a woman
He let me love woman
He changed me to think like a man
He made me love men
It started with a feeling.
A hidden fascination.
I had to stop it, I never screamed
I needed to find all the pieces.
So that the devil wouldn't lift me up
I forgot to ask god to keep me sane
I begged him to keep my mouth shut
But in the end, well I have given up
I let the beast run wild and free
And just be the person that they all hate me to be.

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  • Bello.Midnight
    September 23

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    ♣ BLAKE

    He handed me the worst possible card I could have asked for.
    He let me stay a woman
    He let me love woman
    He changed me to think like a man
    He made me love men

    QUESTIONS!!!!!
    All these things that you want to know..
    But might never know..
    Just keep your chin Up baby...
    things will look brighter I know.

    ♣ BLAKE


  • SeleneStone gold member
    March 17
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    Such a deep write that reveals so very much about your inner self and I must say dear you are fascinating I love love love those last lines. The person that you are meant to be no matter what anyone else thinks is the person that you should be. A wonderful write as always Blair
    ~Joann

  • V l
    March 16
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    Very deep and very raw still like the hot guy.


  • Siby Anan
    March 16

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    This one brings us more deeper into you. A poem so deeply written about oneself always comes out to be a masterpiece

    You've done such a great job here. Especially the last two lines. Where the rest of the poem shows everything you didn't want, the last two lines showed strength and rebelling.


  • FantasyFable
    March 16

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    Oh god I am in love with the last two lines!!! Don't they flow so brilliantly!! and they trip off your tongue really well. There my favourite. I like the use of God and the devil - that you were confused and asked for help - but the devil came through the door first instead of god and turned you into something that sounds totally insane and that everyone hates - but that you are kinda flowing quite nicely with it!! It has a very personal feel to it and it ripped with emotion - well bloody done girl this one is excellent - poetically publishing material this is!!


  • So Strange Greeters member
    March 16

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    This was really good, well written and I think the entire piece of poetry you have here was really good. I think that the flow, the meaning and the style of the poetry were all uniquely well done and I will be going on to read another one right away.

    Keep up the great work, Blair. I really enjoyed reading this, my buddy.

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