Under my crimson smile

He is starting to take control
Under my crimson smile
He will start to tear me apart
Wait till I have nothing left
Still I hunger what he feeds on
Like this pure delight
I feel his dark soul seeping through
Provoking everything that makes him a part of you
This is a part of me
As soon as they all collide
You have promise for something beautiful
I want to see you rip it from me to
he is starting to take control
Tell me what will you alter-ego do
Under this grey cold smile
I think he will be here for a while.

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  • Bello.Midnight
    September 23, 2008

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    ♣ Blake

    This is a part of me
    As soon as they all collide
    You have promise for something beautiful
    I want to see you rip it from me to
    he is starting to take control

    YOu and I both know exactly how this feels and the "riddle" of the poem per say. I really loved this and what it portrayed in a sak and slightly twisted manner.


    ♣ Blake



  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    March 17, 2008

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    Very interesting and I love it! I love this layout too and that photo is so wicked. Your poems are always brilliant and this one is certainly no exception to that. Amazing write and so incredibly deep.
    ~Joann


  • Fizbop
    March 16, 2008

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    A riddle for ones self how approprate this is very deep and flows very wonderful. I really like your poetry.


  • Siby Anan
    March 16, 2008

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    Fantastic!
    I agree with Crystal Enchantress, it is like a riddle. And you'd have to think very deeply to understand it

    Fabulous


  • FantasyFable
    March 16, 2008

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    wow! this is like a riddle - I get the gist to it tho - it sounds like something is living inside of you and breaking out and that he is being to show through your smile and the things that you do - your alter ego - love it! very descriptive - the picture is creepy as well! lol - I like how you have lined it all out that is new and gives a different sort of layout well done! right on to the next one!

  • V l
    March 16, 2008
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    love it hot guy too i just love gothic vampire looking guys

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