Street Address

As the birds sing
she brushes her hair
in the morning sunlight1

Her mind wanders into lifes spaces
where nothing seems to stay the same
except her address2

He came and went so fast with love
she hardly had a chance to cry
when he left her behind3

Not being able to move other then
brushing her long hair looking out the window
as he walked away
from her address

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  • Rovingone
    June 21, 2008

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    Very good piece of writing. She's probably better off without him. I like the reference to nothing seeming to stay the same, except her address. I know that feeling.


  • LadyLionnir
    March 16, 2008

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    A new way to look at the situation. I love it and it flowed smoothly! Nice imagery and choice of words. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!


  • Jasmine Rayne
    March 15, 2008
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    I love this. It's so sad, but very well written. Great job! ^_^











    -Lily ♥

  • blindmouse2
    March 15, 2008

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    That is a cute poem
    i liked it
    i am not so good a poetry
    and i could understand what you were trying to make a point of

    good for you!!


  • tallblondie gold member
    March 15, 2008
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    A cute little piece.

    beginning: 3, language: 2, plot: 2, ending: 2, dialog: 2, characters: 2.

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