You need to take the express way and get here fast.
My hearts broken and it's beating wildly in this cast.
Get the doctor tell em' "lets go"
get here before this beat begins to slow.1
Dodge the traffic, and get here with speed and force,
You need to be here boy if love's gonna take it's course.
There's no detours in this love,
It's not king of the hill- no push, no shove.2
And if a cop pulls you over what ya gonna say?
That your in a hurry to get to my heart today?
And he'll say boy she doesn't have a fever,
Remember you were the one to leave her.3
And if the sirens don't make your ears bleed,
Let me tell you the warning to heed.
Don't be too hasty, this isn't a fight.
If your gonna love me this time, then you better do it right.4
Take a good look at yourself,
Before you start to look at someone else.
These rear view mirrors are just for show,
If you're gonna look at the past, then boy just let my heart go.5
Red, yellow, Green let's go,
If your fixing my heart this time, better let the doctors know,
Because my heart doesn't need their morphine to make it smile,
Only if you say your in this gear for a while. 6
So take my heart and escort it to my lips,
So that the next time we meet, you can feel that broken kiss.7
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Author notes
Eh. I think my ending could be better.
It was tough coming up with this.
for the contest influenced by: Kickstart My Heart
A contest entry
- Too Fast For Love... by Pray For Me.
100 points, ended June 28, 2008, 5 entries
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My heart is all over the place.
Comments
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Thanks for entering this in the contest. This sounds like it could be a song. I can definately see it as one. Great job. Good luck in the other contests you entered this in.
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I posted below when you entered in another of my poetry contests. Thanks for entering this one again and good luck.
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Whoa. That was incredible. This could be, like, a song; it had this fast rhythm to it. I love the informality of this. Great job.
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AMAZING POEM. Made me go aww and I'll be damned before I admit I got a little misty.
LOVED IT. *bookmarks*
erica
xoxo
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awww i really like this. that's awesome. great poems.
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Thank You.
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good
i think the best part is from stanza 5 line 3 all the way to the end, great job -
Hum, interesting. The ideas good, but it seemed kind of repetative. A little long and drawn out maybe?
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Thanks for entering this in the contest. I can definately see the influence of Kickstart My Heart. I listened to that song while reading this. Everything seemed to flow perfectly and I thought that the wording was great. Great job with this and take care!
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I'm on my way, love.
I'm taking the fastest route possible.
Just make sure you're still there waiting when I arrive.
It won't be long. I promise.
I love the story also.
It's very good.
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