I'm young, my heart needs a poet
and damn, you're a lover
but I ache without beauty in words.1
I love your nostalgia and your jokes
I love your little magic tricks
and sleight of hand.
But I almost can't stand
not being stimulated by your thoughts
to the degree I thought I would.2
Women like the tall dark and handsome
because we're afraid of what's underneath
something shallow or quirky
or uneducated
I've preferred you aloof in the past.3
I thank you for being polite
I thank you for being a perfect gentleman
but once, just once, couldn't you
pour wine into the ocean as an appeasement for safe travels?
Will you ever tell me that you've decided
to live on beans and water until
they've found a cure for malaria?
Would you string up your undies on a flag pole and salute them?4
I couldn't care if you couldn't rhyme "look" with "book"
(I didn't mean that kind of poet)
But I need more than what you represent in this town.
Find something poetic in life and chase it.
You could make me run faster than I've ever dreamed.5
Author notes
By the way, by "damn you're a lover," I did not mean it in any sexual connotation. That would A- be creepy and B- not your business. I meant in a purely Prince Charming sense.
Hit me up.
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Errrr- "and damn, but you're a lover/ but I ache without beauty in words." has thrown me off. Take out just one "but." It's a run-on! Well, to continue...
AGH it hurts, I love this so much. I totally agree, by the way. A little pointless romanticism wouldn't hurt anyone.
I can tell that the speaker knows that it's ridiculous... "Would you string up your boxers on a flag pole and salute them?" but it is god-damn necessary anyway. Would you mind terribly if I wrote out and paired this poem with some sort of artsy-hobo embellishment sort of thing? I like it and want it up on my wall. Now. My boyfriend needs to see it, too.
Great great great, thank you so much! I should have read this first, I honestly prefer this to the spin-the-bottle one...
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kk, I took out the............. first but. it is a little better now.
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I'm surprised that you like it better, but I'm glad. I was just about to delete because I felt that it was cheesy. It said exactly what I needed to say, though.
Three cheers for ridiculousity being damn necessary! You can take whatever bits of it you like! I think I'll dedicate it to you ^_^
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Great job, keep writing!
ANa
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I love your second stanza, and the way all of the words are precise and flowing.Usually people rhyme so much in poems, and I like that,but yours was formatted differently form what I could have guessed it to be-thats whats makes me love this piece.
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