Don't you understand? I'm not coming back.
Stop pretending I'm still the same person,
Because I'm not. My heart has turned black.
You stare at me, making my pain worsen.1
Just forget about who I used to be.
You, once my friends, don't know me anymore.
It's who I am now that matters to me.
Thinking of times we shared makes my heart sore.2
You aren't even worth remembering.
Stay out of my way and out of my life,
Or your corpses I'll be dismembering.
Don't cause me such unnecessary strife.3
Leave me alone, before I start to crack.
Don't you understand? I'm not coming back.
Author notes
I tried to write this from someone's point of view...can you guess whose? Two someones, actually - Aya Umitake and Sasuke Uchiha. This is supposed to be sort of like Aya's thoughts towards Sakumo, Megumi, and Kazu, and Sasuke's thoughts towards Naruto and Sakura.
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I LOVE IT
I LOVE POETRY
I RECOMMEND Cash Money on this website for other good poetry
BUT THAT WAS GREAT
I ALMOST CRIED
YOU ROCK -
YAY!!
Chibi luffs poetry! The rhyme was a little off and you did have to force a few lines, but the last couplet send shivers down my spine.
Chibi
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Thanks. ^^ This makes me want to write another sonnet... Haven't written one of those for a while.
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I never heard of Aya Umitake ;o
But a pretty good view of Sasuke's thoughts. Thanks.
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wow how depressing... I LOVE IT! keep doing a good job!
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Thank you ^^
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Great job, keep writing!
ANa
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Thank you! ^^
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...this scared me.
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Lolz! Thanks for the comment and applause <3
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Aya Umitake or Aya Uchida? Or did she change the name in the story?
Anyway...whoa. Bitter and saddening! Great rhyme scheme and sentence structure! Made the poem even more interesting to read.
Fantasticness xD
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Her name used to be Uchida, but Chibi decided Uchida sounded too much like Uchiha, and she switched it to Umitake. Anyways, thanks for commenting. ^^ And for the clappies <3
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Oh! I thought it was just a profile name change thing
Hey, anytime
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