Wait

Time trudged by, hope had sprung eternal. 1

She sat, she stood, she reclined. Her phone stayed silent, radiating sympathy that would have stung her pride. But she was content in her denial, her faithful expectancy, even as her cell phone stayed still on the table. Her laptop was propped half against her knees, half against her stomach as she laid back on her tweed-upholstered sofa, head against the armrest, monitoring her empty infertile inbox.2

Her satin dress was crushed. Her shoes, no longer fresh and pristine due to intervals of pacing, lay on the floor next to her. Her hair was mussed from dozing. She felt her lipstick bleeding onto chin from when she'd chewed her lip while watching the clock, her eyeliner smudging at the corner from the single tear she hadn't expected.3

Her head came up slowly as the denial receded and reality dawned. She set her laptop next to her, deliberately closing the top as she stood. She went to her kitchen table, reached behind it, and unplugged the phone. She picked up her cell phone, preparing to turn it off. Then as the truth of her situation stung her again, she flung it against the wall instead. She swore, and relished the word that always made her feel better.4

She moved into her bathroom and looked into her own eyes, studying herself. Shame in her eyes, a shiny tear track on her cheek, an expensive dress wreathed in creases. 5

"So this is what it looks like to be stood up." 6

She let her hair down and scrubbed her face clean. She changed into her slip nightgown and padded into the kitchen. She filled a wineglass with vino, taking a sip as she stared into her backyard. The lights around the yard cast rays here and there, softly lighting the shadows on the trees and casting colors on the mist that danced off the water from the fountain.7

She went outside and laid in her hammock, taking a deeper swig of wine. She lay for a while, examining her feelings, then pushing them away, and again. A rustle was heard, then a face appeared. The joy she had anticipated feeling leapt to her face, was replaced by a string of emotions, then the anger he had expected appeared.8

"Wait," he whispered.9

She loved his face then, his eyes, and the feeling in them, the one word he whispered, the way the mist of the fountain tickled her arm, the sting of wine in her throat, the tinges of it playing with her brain, making her giddy. But she didn't want this to show. She stood, resisting the temptation to stay, to drink more wine. It would be too easy to repeat last night; a tangle of limbs and tongues and inebriated minds.10

"I did," she told him in the same quiet tones.11

He loved her face back, her eyes, and the feeling in them, the two words she whispered.12

"Wait." He started forward, stopped himself, his hand going to the back of his head and tugging on the soft, dark hair there. He looked back at her. She was watching him. Impulsively, he leaned forward and caught her lips with his.

Author notes


by beezy92

Option 3: Romance

Orange...becuase I just had this juicy, delicious orange that tasted like an orange, grapefruit hybrid. It was amazing...you have no idea.
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I have a white flip phone from Virgin Mobile. It's cheap and ugly and I don't use it anymore...lol. But I loved my first phone!

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  • Gulfbreeze
    October 31, 2008
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    excellent emotional write, great job!


  • Shiki
    June 2, 2008
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    Lol I noticed lots of wait in this but this was a good write keep it up


  • damnxrightxitsxanna
    April 28, 2008

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    wow, my first reaction was "this guy is a jerk!" my second one was "Ok, she shouldnt drink wine..."I loved it, it was short, and it made me hate the guy I loved it.. but maybe you could make it even better(worse) if you would hint that something like that happened many times before... great job!

  • mysterydragon
    March 30, 2008

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    this is an amazing story. i loved the anger and sadness in the beginning. it was so emotional. it was a great write. good job.


  • Zerstort
    March 29, 2008
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    I'm just letting you know that I've read your entry and I'll read it again before the close.

    Thanks for entering

    --Aden


  • checkmate-
    March 27, 2008

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    Very good! Nice emotion and description. I love the plot! Obviously you proofread this very well as I could find no mistakes! Good luck, keep writing, and thanks for entering!


  • IxLovexElphiex
    March 21, 2008

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    adorable! really really cute!
    very emotional and a great write!
    thanks so much for entering and good luck!


  • i-love-yu..x
    March 16, 2008

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    Amazing

    Bee, you are an excellent writer! This story made me want to cry, especially when it said that 'she' was stood up.

    By the way, what's her name?? Am desperate to know!!

    Great story! Hope you win the contest!!

  • i-love-yu..x
    March 16, 2008
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    Amazing

    Bee, you are an excellent writer! This story made me want to cry, especially when it said that 'she' was stood up.

    By the way, what's her name?? Am desperate to know!!

    Great story! Hope you win the contest!!


  • Seachelle
    March 15, 2008

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    Bee! I actually read this like, two days ago in my history class! Sorry I didn't write a comment right away.. But I am now!! *heart*

    The one thing I wasn't too sure about with this story was the sentence structure in the beginning. There was a little too much "She did this, she thought that..". It might be better if you played around a bit with the wording of things to make it interesting. I know you didn't mention her name on purpose, which is a good thing as long as you convey to your reader that the name isn't important I felt that in this case, a name wasn't necessary, but you might want to word things differently...

    Wow. I just repeated myself about three or four times in one paragraph! *smacks self*

    I am soooo tired right now.. it's like a quarter till three am!!

    Anyway.. The good news is.. That your writing is definately improving!! I like your description of her anger.. I have often times felt that bad when Morgan didn't call right away.. Grrr... And regardless if that guy is semi-apologizing, I still don't like him lol

    Have a good day bee, and I will probably catch you online today at some point

    Ana


  • Melli
    March 13, 2008

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    Awwh, really good. I know who wrote this and it's so very good. Defiantly finalists! =) I could just feel the emotion of this girl, and what she was going through. I did see like two mistakes (spelling and 1 grammar) but other than that, perfect. Thanks, and good luck!

    -Melli<33

    P.S. KEEP WRITING!!

    • Melli
      March 13, 2008
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      Just one quick thing, did u add what cell u have or if u dont in author notes? and whats this about a orange hyrbird?


      • beezy92
        March 13, 2008
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        Whoops!! Sorry. I added it now. The orange part was for another contest. I love your icon btw. Nice hair!


  • DeadlyTurnip
    March 13, 2008

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    Aw. That was adorable Very sweet!!! It was beautiful. It was adorable. Redundant, I know, but basically it was really good and I loved it.

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