Twilight Widow

Staring outside
Moon rising high
Star gaze down on us
The web shining in the light1

Windows of web
Silk weaving through eachother
One black creature creeping
Red hourglass ticking
Sand following
Darkness growing2

Legs delicately touching the string
Dancing in the moonlight
Rythmicly crawling
Dawn arising
Venom dripping through fangs
Blood pulsing through veins
We will rename the creature
From Black Widow to
Twilight Widow

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  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    March 13, 2008

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    You have a talent for description and make interesting use of your words.

    Terrific analogies . I’m curious to ‘See’ how you handle prose.

    Welcome to SW. If we can be of help please let us know.