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A single tear escaped his eye. The first of many more tears to come. His dirty hand wiped his face but it only smeared the mud around. The night was coming and another mission was to be done. He realized that the night was not his friend and that it concealed so many who wanted to take his life. Sitting against the bare brick wall with small stone edges keeping comfort away, he began to organize his pack and check his weapon again for the third time today. Iraq in the early evening was not a friendly place. Bob's only solace was that he shared this time and place with the others in his team. They all were here...those that were left. He forced himself to avoid thinking of his lost friends. Now the night approached again. His Night Vision Goggles were charged and his weapon clean and ready....if only he were not so scared.2
Across from him, Tom watched his friend. He knew that he might again crack with the strain. "His hesitation may cost my life." He thought. "Should I report him?" "If I do, he will probably be sent to a mental hospital or prison for cowardice."3
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Wow, what a great write!! and i the tital caught my atention
Nightly Fears....and the first couple of lines was a real good opening, and then the middle and the end was great aswell lool so yeah a all round great write!!!! -
Ouch, is the first word that comes to mind. I like Tom's POV. Good, albeit controversial topic, and the night fears are very realistic. Good job.
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You really do put alot of nice adjectives in there like "stone edges keeping comfort away."Post more soon.
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I like this one a lot it is very interesting to me, i think the backround really enhances the ideas you are trying to portray.
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This was awesome man. This was full of emotion, even though it was just a story. Its full of fear, and un-certainty, it was awesome, and sad too. It made me get the shivers...for some unknown reason.
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this was truly an amazing write,i enjoyed reading this very much,,i wish you luck on your up and coming writes,,have a wonderful day,,cya later
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Great I love it.
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Been there, as you know. I was a young man when I sat in the jungle of Vietnam. We had no night vision googles. We just sat waiting to die. Sometimes you wish that you would just have died with your buddies.
I identified with this, my friend.
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Brilliant Write!
You have done brilliant with this Chuck, the atmosphere charged with expectation of the unexpected, the emotions running high, this shows in the words you have used here and you have managed to convey this very well in how you have penned your write!
What it must have really been like for the guys in this situation one can hardly dare to contemplate! yet they did it with great courage, thinking only of the job they were there to do.
Tis good to see you again, thank you for a good read, hope to read more soon.
~Katie~
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You really made me sit up and take note with this one Chuck. I cannot begin to know or understand what it must be like to be in that situation, to know that at any given time another friend may be lost. Your words here truly make me realize just how lucky I am , and what price my freedom comes at. God bless and thank you for sharing with us the experience. Boy I am so very lucky, thanks to the wonderfull souls that keep my freedom intact. Excellent write, take care...mal
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WoW Chuck, when you come back, you come back with a bang, inspired and ready to hold us spellbound. I hope you are planning to add to this. You have all the makings of a great story here. You know, you could do this... you could write a full length story. You are always encouraging me but you have great skill at story telling yourself and you have so much personal experience to draw from. I am never disappointed when I read your stories and I have read what others have said as well. Something to think about as we head into a new year... new paths to travel...
Again... Welcome Back! 
~Kimberly
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Chuck,
Nice to see you back. Hope you are well.
Very good write. Unfortunatly, so very true of our poor men and women over there. So frightened. Not knowing what to do about their friends, their buddies.
Not a life for such young men/women.
Cheryl
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