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denied of who I am
I might as well be dead
For what its worth
Ill see no blood
I will make this quick
I will take it slow
I will watch this pain
Suffering for so long
Ive long given up my right to live
I am to sick inside to want to give
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As my mind will begin to wander
Numb controls this time
I know inside I'm breathing
See nothing turns out fine
Nothing ever comes
When you let yourself be free
Try to teach a lesson
Find some place to breath
Inch my inch
Taking metal to my skin
Self destructive
No one sees the pills
I love you all to much
To let myself give in
To let myself be stubborn
Cause Golden gates aren't right
I'd rather be a shadow
Than fall into the dark
let me slip into the light

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I was a little out of it with depression when I wrote this. No sleep can do that to you. But I am a bit angry with some people at the moment. I just want to breath, and not have to be told my breath is putrid.

Blair

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  • CeliaBby
    June 1
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    oops clapps xD

  • CeliaBby
    June 1

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    "I love you all to much
    To let myself give in" That part reminds me of myself. Depression was probably tough on you, but at least you let it out. In a peom. I think. I hope whatever happend turned out okay.


  • Bello.Midnight
    September 23, 2008

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    ♣ Blake

    As my mind will begin to wander
    Numb controls this time
    I know inside I'm breathing
    See nothing turns out fine
    Nothing ever comes
    When you let yourself be free
    Try to teach a lesson
    Find some place to breath

    I adore this poem: Hunny I am sorry I was not there for you... knowing that you wrote this a long time does not change a thing: but I am proud of how much you have grown.

    ♣ Blake


  • Seachelle
    March 15, 2008

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    Depression is a terrible and icky-gross feeling.. I hate going through it and it always helps to sit down and write, which you have done. We never should let people try to change who we are, but we should always try to get better. Thank you for writing this, I'm sure it helped in some way to relieve stress. This was a good read and I enjoy reading your stuff
    Ana


  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    March 14, 2008

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    Awwww hon I can relate and oh yea lack of sleep will make the depression come in worse. Hope that you are doing much better now. This is a really amazing poem and I can certainly relate to it. I try to fight sleep too and depression, but sometimes they just want to creep in and take hold.
    ~Joann


  • Pudding-zilla silver member
    March 12, 2008
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    this was an excellent write, I hope you come out of depression, and feel better.
    -Ev


  • Fizbop
    March 11, 2008

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    very intresting write i feel a lot in this one and hope that you sort the depression out. It will get better

  • V l
    March 11, 2008
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    I lvoe the photo and this pome even more you contunes to sirprise me.


  • Shah Z
    March 11, 2008
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    I told you that you were scary.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.


  • LadyLionnir
    March 11, 2008

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    Oh, yes, very angry. You okay, Blair? But seriously...it was what I'm looking for. Quick, creative, emotional. I love the phrase:
    "Cause Golden gates aren't right"
    The meaning in it really stirred me, as I expected from you. Great write!! And get some sleep, love.


    • Prodigious.Mirth
      March 11, 2008
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      Thanks love, yes I am pretty damn good now with sleep {forced myself though} ^.^ Thanks.. I think that has to be my favourite line. It just meant I guess that heavan, and all godly lights wont help a satanist... neither will placing your faith in something almighty, in the end your the only one you can place your faith in.

      Thanks for the *applause* much appreciated - Blair

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