He stalkes the night

He stalkes the night
Praying upon the virgins
Soiled amongst a darkness
teeth baring
ready to rip
Ready to bite of more than he can chew
Dominate
He will break you apart
vigilance to perfection
Almost to beautiful to breath
Feel the wrath of his claws
Feel the aching tension rots as he drowns you
prey for heavenly mercy
Burning what you have been made to become
swallow the seeds in which you must taste
He is a walking destruction
Upon a vampire stake
Then just like that
He's gone

Author notes

I take no credit for this poem it was all Blake's idea.. he was the one who had to come out and bother me, he wanted his 15 seconds of fame... so you can thank him...

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  • CeliaBby
    June 1

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    Very dark. I don't like vampires, but the way you wrote it made him look like an animal. X) virgins? Nice. I like how ou have him disappear at the end. Very well written.. Three claps for you


  • Bello.Midnight
    September 23, 2008
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    ♣ Blake

    Horror girl
    when you write dark you go all the way.
    Loved it <3

    ♣ Blake


  • Fizbop
    March 11, 2008

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    Really well done and a gothic tone to it this flows very nicely and is to the point and give me a since of darkness.


  • DarkOneShadow
    March 10, 2008
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    Creepy

    Definitely a gothic feel to this. Good job!

    DarkOne

  • pruedence
    March 10, 2008

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    Good discription of a Vampire and its world. Spooky somewhat with a gloomy feel. Well done, thanks for sharing

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