Ryan Garret

I lay awake1

because i can not sleep2

I remember that day to well3

the day when he left4

He left in my arms5

I remember the blood running down his head6

and onto my clothes7

but i didn't care8

I just sat there9

Crying and holding him10

whispering "don't go" and "I love you"11

that day is sketched into my heart12

We just started dating 13

I never told him how i felt14

I never told him those three special words before15

but i wish i did16

I felt that way since that day17

we met nine years before18

those were the best years of my life19

bu no my life is over20

don't know how i will get over the loss21

but i will, that is what you would want22

but i'm not just going to date some guy23

that guy has to be special24

special like you25

but no one will ever 26

fill the empty space inside my heart27

where you used to be

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  • KodyBoye
    March 10, 2008

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    I'm finding that almost all the poems on storywrite are dark and depressing nowadays...

    Oh well, that's fine with me.

    I like this poem, just watch out for the I! You must capitalize it, unless you're following a no-capitalization thing, in which case all the i's in the poem should be lowercase.

    This is a very good poem, which I like very much. It has a deep meaning that some people don't ever experience. I think you captured it quite well.

    ~ Kody Boye