Pain

He slapped her hard and she fell to the ground. She knew not to cry. 1

He pulled her up by her hair and he swore he heard it rip a little. He threw her on2

the bed and her head hit the wall. She wasnt bleeding yet, so it was okay.3

She knew she was his slave, and she would take it all till he stopped, or she died.4

He knew what he was going to do and how he was going to do it. He just didnt know5

if he was going to kill her or not yet.6

He blindfolded her and shoved a burban soaked bandana in her mouth. It stung her chaped lips.7

She winced when he pulled off her shirt. He admired his work then ripped off her skirt.8

He chained her up with chains on the wall. This was just the start. He pulled out a torch from his 9

desk drawer and heated up the chains. She started crying from the pain, but didnt scream.10

She almost gagged from the smell of her own burning flesh. He stopped when the chains were plasterd to her skin11

and blood started to pur from her writsts.He shakled up her ancles and eagle spreaded her.12

He didnt like pubic hairs at all. He Ripped them out buy the hand fuls13

making her buck. This was her punishment for not shaving. He undid his pants and pulled them14

and his boxers down. Anyone would have stared in amazement at his dick. It was huge. 15

He pulled up her legs the best he could and somehow shoved his dick in her ass hole and thrusted in16

till he felt her rip ans she was bloody. He got up and replaced his dick with a 12 by 12 inch dildo.17

he got a really really ridgy, almost spiky, spinning dildo out of a bag. He stuffed it in her 18

pussy and watched her writhe. He got electic shock things and attached the pads on her legs,pussy,and clit. 19

He turned them on full force.She cryed out. Screamed. He pulled the spikey dildo out of her pussy.He got20

on top of her and fucked her hard. He thrusted in painfully. He swore he almost broke her pelvis and legs.21

He finnaly came,but kept on going. Then he got a knife and started at her shoulders and cut down them,not deep22

then started on the other side. Blood was all over the bed. He fucked her more and more, all through the night.23

When he woke up the next morning she was alive, but barley.24

What now? Fuck her more or take her to the hospital?

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  • jasje
    May 18
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    nice mmm^^


  • Dragonbabyx3
    January 5

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    Damn. Wow. This was a bit too much even for me! A bit serial killerish. Kinda freaky. The last line was a kicker! Great writing! You are an awesome writer!


  • Hermanator1 silver member
    March 18, 2008

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    Mercy

    The life of a serial killer. Doubt if he needs to think too long about what to do with her. A live witness to all that is not the most intelligent solution for him.
    Good write, especially provocative where he cut her open then continued to fuck her.
    Only part I was surprised with was that she Knew she was his slave. Given the situation I think Prisoner might have worked better.
    Might make this into a series of what he does to women and how it is a sickness that drives him on. Might pick up a loyal follower or two. Hint

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 4.

  • himan
    March 14, 2008
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    oh lol ns

  • pinkielephant
    March 11, 2008

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    not bad

    wow... i think that this was a really great story, although very gruesome. Also, in line 24, you spell the word "barley" when I think you mean "barely"


  • Prodigious.Mirth
    March 10, 2008

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    MMMMM SMOTHERD IN A BLOOD BATH
    very well done..Just the way I love it... brutal and a near death situation^>^


    pussy and watched her writhe. He got electic shock things and attached the pads on her legs,pussy,and clit.

    SADISTIC ^>^

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