Telling her off

I was in the lunch room. And she came right behind me and was about to take her picture with her phone and I got a hold of her phone right as she was snapping the picture.
And I snatched the phone away from her and I yelled at her "What do you not get!" And I threw her phone so hard to the ground (this is when all eyes in the cafeteria went on us) that it shattered into so many tiny pieces. And with so much force that all the pices went out 2 tables in each direction and the pieces rained down during and right afterwards the reining phone pieces the school fell into a deep uncomphortable silence right a bunch of pieces went everywhere but two parts brought my attention. The battery had split into many pieces. The acid reined on my hair making my head burn and it bleached my hair(I found out later). And the sync card(memory of the phone) fell on her head, cracked in two. After it floated onto her head. I continued to yell at her "I Do NOT love you, Leave Me The Fuck ALONE" She turned around and left the room with the same loving face about her.
After she left there was just one person clapping at first. But then there was a couple people and they encouraged others to clap with them. And then when a bunch of them was clapping they started cheering for me. They all rushed me and carried me around the school. 3 guys around the group were yelling "this guy told off his The Tip Toe Hoe"

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This is about me telling off my stalker, yes i could've been nicer about it. But after 4 months of her stalking me, I could not take it anymore, her trying to take a picture was the last straw

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  • KodyBoye
    March 9, 2008
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    I'm not trying to be rude, but this is ridden with grammatical errors. You need to use commas and periods. Without a comma, the story doesn't flow and it makes the writing look unprofessional.

    I do think you have something here. Just do a little editing and you can have something even better.

    • Crazy-Dan
      March 11, 2008
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      well I'm not good with proper grammer stuff rather than telline me I got some. Because I know I do have problems. Just tell me what is wrong.