A slight smile crossed Kale’s face,1
"This’ll be easy," he said as he grabbed an envelope from the man in front of him, 2
"Halves in there, you’ll get the rest of the money when it’s done" Kale’s smile dropped as he looked at the man in front of him, his long brown hair was tied back with a few strands coming loose, he had a small moustache and wore a heavy metal band T-shirt. Taking the picture out of the envelope Kale looked at the young beauty he was out to seek, then turning Kale waved his hand in the air as a small goodbye.3
Opening his eyes Kale thought once more to the day he had taken this job, it had been over a month now. Looking at the gun in his hands that was now pointed at the young girl in front of him, she stood there in the same white dress she had been wearing the day they had met, her diamond blue eyes starting to fill with tears as she stared into his emerald green ones. 4
"Why?" she asked his, he had been with her everyday since they met and she had fallen for him straight away.5
Kale tried to answer, but his throat was blocked, thinking he couldn’t even come up with the right words. They stood there in silence for what seemed like hours, when finally he answered, 6
"It was…its my job" trying hard to hide the pain that was now rising in his voice he swallowed loudly.7
"Please Kale, let me go. You don’t want to do this" her voice was shaky as she took a step forward.8
Kale closed his eyes for a brief moment, re-opening them he found the courage to walk up to her, fear stricken she fell to the floor and cried one last time to be free, clutching tightly he whispered 9
"I’ am sorry" and pulled the trigger. 10
Now lying on the ground she could feel the taste of blood in her mouth, her tears that had formed in her eyes came flooding down and with her last breathe she whispered 11
"I love you". 12
Falling to his knee’s he pulled the gun up, a single tear left his eye and fell to the floor. The strong feelings rising in him he couldn’t understand, all he knew was to kill, never had he loved, never had someone loved him, and now the emotions in his heart were building up, feeling it breaking. Running a soft finger over her breathless lips, a soft kiss following, he silently said goodbye.13
Author notes
working title. wat u think?
[= tell me the truth... is this any good?
Comments
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The Professional...
A film about a 'hit man' with the French actor, Jean Reno and Natalie Portman as a child actor, plays upon the same theme, as do several other films and stories when the person paid to assassinate someone develops an affection for them. So I guess it is a legitimate theme for some writers to explore.
You have some mechanical and grammatical errors that you might want to address, but your brief story does indeed illustrate the moral crisis of taking a human life for pay, as a 'job'.
Good luck in your writing experiments...
amicus...

