Dear John,1
This is the last time you will be hearing from me. Your goon bodyguards and your punk little brother Bobby have made it clear that I should stay away from you. Also, you can tell your older brother Teddy to stop making those threatening phone calls. I know you said you can’t see me any more because you have your image to protect, but you should have never said that you loved me. Now I can’t seem to find a reason to live with out you. That is the reason I must go away. 2
I hope your wife Jackie knows what type of man she married. I feel sorry for your children. When they don’t fit into your plans will you toss them away the way you did me?3
I could hardly bring myself to go on stage to sing Happy Birthday to you, but I did it hoping you would see the love in my eyes. When you said you could quit politics after hearing my song, I thought you meant it. I waited for many long lonely days and nights to hear from you again. I really believed you had feelings for me. Now I know I was just another notch on your belt.4
I plan to leave the country and never come back. I will start packing in the morning. There is a knock on my door. I can’t imagine who would come calling at this hour. Even now I hope it is you. I will love you forever my darling. 5
Marilyn M.6
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Hey
Thank you for entering Nu-Speak's first contest.
This is a really well wrote piece of work, i'm intregued to know more of the story behind the letter. you people keep on doing that to me!
I like how realistic this affair could be, that she held such deep feelings for him only for them to be thrown back in her face; yet she still waits.
Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest.
Nu-Speak
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The touch of history DOES give the letter a different light, in my opinion. It makes the affair more realistic and heart breaking. Great work and good luck in the contest!! I loved this line-
' I know you said you can’t see me any more because you have your image to protect, but you should have never said that you loved me.'
Keep writing!
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Very interesting! JFK and Norman Gene, classic story. Writen in a "Dear John" letter, which kind of makes me laugh. Very well written, very unique!
Good luck, and thanks for entering!
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Very interesting... at first I wasn't sure what was going on (don't know much about history - sorry (>_<) ) but then the guy below me explained it and I think you did a great job. You made me want to read more about what happened next and that's saying a lot. fabulous job and thanks for entering!
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This letter is quite interesting. Writing from past idols posts of view (John Kennedy and Marilyn Monroe right?) is awesome. Reading up on history is my latest pass time, so this really spoke to me.
I love that you threw in part about his wife and children. "I hope your wife Jackie knows what type of man she married. I feel sorry for your children. When they don’t fit into your plans will you toss them away the way you did me?" Even though it is sad, i feel it did so much for the letter. Really portrays the way Marilyn feels about John
Happy musing and best of luck in the contest!
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That's really sad. I love it. Thank you for entering my contest
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There are a lot of emotions and i hear where your coming from i love this poem and wish you the best of luck
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Aaaaaw! This is so sad, and yet it's really good! You portray the mood really well and capture the reader's attention fast.
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First off, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest. I greatly enjoyed you Dear John letter. You are quite an amazing writer! Great job! Haha I'm excited for you!
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This is a really great piece. I just have to say, if this John is that type of person, then he doesnt deserve you =). Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.
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I enjoyed reading this. When I got to the birthday part I started to have my suspicions but nothing more than that 'til I got to the end. That was a very nice surprise :0) Honestly, I felt like it could have used a little more emotion, but that's just my thought.
Great work!
beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, characters: 2.
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Wow. That was incredibly good - and I could see the entire thing playing before my eyes.
I really enjoyed reading this - good luck in the contest.
Oh. Only one note on the spelling thing that I noticed : "because you have your imagine [image] to protect"
Other than that, you're good.
Good job! Keep it up!
erica[♥]xoxo
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