"The Rainbow is on the other side of the mountain, where the earth ends." Gladis said to her new Psychatrist. 1
"Gladis, where exactly is the end of the world? Why is the rainbow on the other side, but not this side?" 2
Gladis grinned, "The Rainbow is on the side that has more light, because only rainbows can be seen in light."3
"What about the rain Gladis? Isn't it when it rains that we see rainbows? I know you've seen rainbows in the puddles, you've told me that many times before."4
Gladis shook her head, "No, rainbows don't come out after rain.. They are always there, the puddle is just a reflection of the rainbow at the end of the earth." 5
"I see." The psychatrist said, clearly at a loss for words.6
"The Rainbow only comes, when the sun is shining. It doesn't come when you count to five, because I've tried it. So hard, I've tried for the rainbow to come. But it doesn't come for me. I want to know why." Gladis pounded her fists on the table. 7
"It's ok Gladis. You don't need to pound your fists on the table."8
"Yes, I do need to pound the table. I can't get a rainbow, a rainbow! I NEED that rainbow!"9
"Calm down Gladis, calm down and speak calmly." Gladis shook her head and jumped up on her seat. Her knees were to her chin, and she was resting her head on them..10
"I bet Michael could get a rainbow, a big, big rainbow. One that I could see!" 11
"Gladis, please...don't say that name." Michael was the psychatrists son, who had died just a year ago. Gladis had met Michael at his birthday party with his father. That had started a huge fight, which Michael ran out on his party and never came back...until the day he died. He was to high to know he was going to die, but he also wanted to make peace with his father. He never made it through the door because of the drugs in his body.12
"Michael was a good boy. He got a car for his birthday, I got to look at it. He got really mad though, but I knew he would come home. I knew he would come home!" She looked to the doorway and smiled at it. The psychatrist looked there to, and saw nothing. "Michael is here right now. He's going to let me see the rainbow...I don't know if you can see it though Mr. Sir." That was the name she always called him.13
"Gladis, please tell me what do you mean by the rainbow?"14
"The Rainbow, is at the end of the world. Where no one can see it, until the rain falls down and makes a splash. Then the reflection comes and few people see it." The psychatrist looked at her dumbfounded. 15
"I don't understand." Gladis looked and the psychatrist.16
"one is more than two." Her eyes closed, and she fell asleep.17
Author notes
I hope this is ok.... It's basically about only certain people can notice the little things and those little things make life more special with more happiness, and it may take one a while to notice it, but that one will always notice. Which is why one is more than two.
What did you think? Please comment!
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Thanks!
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This is great, and i love the dinamic between the two. Great stroy, best of luck.
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haha, NO PROBLEM! wait...you're going to advertise tokatie?
whose katie?! haha. i'm so confused.
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lol it was in perpective of the patient....so it was like you understnad the patient more than the psychatrist in this.
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How did I not comment on this. I read it, I liked it... the bell probably rang or something. Well anyways, it's cool, Kaz, I like the way you made the physcatrist look worse then the patient... or maybe that's just me
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Cool story...very unique, although it took me a lil while to get it. But I understand now. Good job!
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Thanks for liking it mucho!!!! Lol. I didn't know anyone would like it IM GOING TO ADVERTISE TO KATIE NOW! wait......another Katie not you.
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Kasey that was great! I got it right away, I feel smart I understood your point! hehe
that was really cool though, and it sounds to me like the THERAPIST is the one who needs therapy...hmm.. lol.
well anywho, great story!
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Kasey this is beautiful. I love how you wove this simple tale, I too want to read more. I loved it Kiddo, you're really a great writer! Luv you Sissy xxx
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Typo, no prob. Just thought you should know. Thanks for entering.
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Thanks much for the comment! I'm psyched that you crave more, I mean I never thought this would be good enough...didn't know if people would 1. Know she's insane 2. Understand the meaning 3. Like the wording lol. I wrote it at 11 o'clock at night, so I had noclue...and I didn't reread it so I only knew what I thought when I wrote it.
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I'm sorry I didn't reply to a lot...and do you mean you want me to write more period or do you mean you want me to write more of this piece? lol
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typo!!! Sorry about that. I wrote this at around 11 o'clock at night on a school night...when I was really tired.
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This is very well done, I like it. Just one thing I saw. In the line, 'I knew he woulc come home!' It should be would, other then that very well done.
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I like that a lot! The end is really good! I like the "one is more than two." Anyway this is really good! I like this very much! Good luck in the contest!
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not much too say I usually try to duplicate the efforts of the author in a comment but I havelittle to go on form your last comment to me, hope you get more.....Artis
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Cryptic in a very good way and mysterious. . . it leaves me wondering and craving more. Very simple, no frills, yet it explains everything it needs to, and the storyline seems interesting enough to carry a book, yet it packs quite a punch in this short piece. Great write.
A. M. Adrian
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