We used to pretend,
She and I,
That we were friends.
Just friends.
But we lied.1
We used to pretend,
He and I,
That we were in love.
True love.
But we lied.2
It used to be this way.
We didn't always lie.
She and I
Were friends.
He and I
Were in love.
But the roles were reversed
And so we hid the truth.
And so we lied.3
We went to the movies together,
All three of us.
It made the lie easier.
We went to dances together,
And we danced the night away
In a circle of three.
"Hopefully no one questions it,
Hopefully no one asks."
But someone always did.
And so we lied.4
But on moonlit nights,
When no one was around us,
We would go to a dark place,
She and I,
And for once we wouldn't have to lie.5
We loathed the lie,
And one day we told the truth.6
We were mocked,
Scorned,
Ostracized,
Outcasts,
But TOGETHER.7
Finally.8
So now,
He and I
Are just friends,
Very good friends.
And she and I
Are in love,
Genuine love.
We lied to be accepted,
But we will no more,
Because we'd rather be on the outside
Than lie.
Author notes
I'm female. I entered this contest because I felt that the voices of those who lie to be accepted, needed to be heard.
A contest entry
- Ever Been Judged? by Taylor Renee.
425 points, ended April 17, 2008, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - 2 Hearts by Prodigious.Mirth.
350 points, ended April 27, 2008, 8 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ah I used to be a lesbian, now I am bisexual..but this piece I connected with very well
it was such a truthful piece about lies lol
good luck
well done
thanks for entering
Blair
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Wow, that was truly amazing and so true. I am a lesbian, so it just made it all hit a little closer to home. I love your structure. It was beautiful. That's all I can really think to say. Wonderful job!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Beautiful
A great flow that carries you right along as true love wins over lies. -
Wow.
I absolutely, absolutely love this.
It's a beautifully written piece.
And it's just beautiful all-in-all.
I just love it all together.
It's so sweet, is it true? Just wondering.
I just...wow.
I'm speechless.
It's definitely a finalist, since I love it, and you followed the rules.
Great, great job.
Thank you so much for entering my contest, and I wish you the best of luck.
xoxo
-♥-
Tay
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Actually, it's not true...but I really connected with my characters. Thanks for the review!
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Powerful
This is powerful stuff. I really like the repeated "we lied". That definately ties it all together. You just give us enough details to make your point. Simple and true.
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omg, this is amazing..its exactly how i feel, what i think too. well done
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