Diary Of Ebony Weeler

I awoke that night to mother's screams. Nothing new to be honest but something about the noise she made was different tonight. When I heard a really loud thud I got out of my bed and threw on some clothes. 1

I snuck out my bedroom window and down the tree that's branches lay close. That's when I heard the gun shot and my mother scream my name. I knew if I went back now he'd kill me too and then I couldn't do a bit of good. I ran as fast as I could to my neighbors house. I heard the porch door slam shut behind me and I tried to run faster. I could hear him yelling for me to get my ass back to him...'Over my dead body' I thought. I finally made it my neighbors door and banged on it loudly. 2

It was 12:43 in the morning, I just knew these people would love me. 'Shit, he's getting closer...Open the damn door...Please!' Finally the porch light flicked on and my neighbor opened the door. She saw my dad and pulled me in shutting and locking the door behind me. She was asking me if I was okay and all I wanted was the phone. She handed it to me and I dialed 911.3

Next Day4

My little sister was dead as well as my mother. My dad had been shot 'not that I care' by a police man and was in critical condition. Mom had always looked broken and torn,...but now laying in her coffin I would have sworn on her dead body that she was smiling. She had always dreamed of a better life and running away from the one she had now, but my sister and I had been her chains. Now...she was free. 5

My boy friend walked me home. Home...'I can't stay here' I thought silently looking at the front of my house. When he left I went to my room and broke down crying. Everything I had known was now gone and I had no one left. So I ran...Not because I felt I had to, but because I could.6

So when someone ask why I ran, it's as simple as this. "Because I can"7

Ebony Weeler8

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  • Lurie
    December 6, 2004
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    This is very good, I just noticed a couple small grammatical errors. The 4the line needs rewritten...."I snuck out (of) my bedroom window and down the tree {that's branches lay close.}That part makes no sense....{and down the tree where the branches lay closest to the house} does that sound better?
    Also this part...."I finally made it {to} my neighbors door and banged on it loudly."
    Other than that I really think it's a very good story...although I hope it isn't true! ~Laura

    Edited on Dec 06, 11:43 because 'because I type toooo fast!'.