Beauty's Worth

The moon lingered high above the horizon and it was tinted with an aura of red. The color of blood seeped into its crevices until lakes of crimson is all you could identify. 1

“It’s bad luck,” I claimed, pointing to the celestial body with caution and accusations. “Means danger-did you know that?” 2

Domencio chuckled softly, his cracked lips moving with the laughter. I watched the way his skin formed lines-as if it wasn’t use to the happiness-and I lowered my hand. 3

“Yeah, my dad told me that. He was into such nonsense-just like you,” he whispered, the smile becoming a pursed frown. His strands of honey blond hair fell into his morose eyes-haunting pools of thought…and depression. 4

We kept walking, though, because I didn’t ask more. I focused on the dirty hem of my skirt while he continued to admire the moon. A jagged silence sliced between us on that evening, a sound that had no right to remain so empty and burdening. This wasn’t how our midnight wanderings went-something inside our very souls had been sparked. But what? 5

“In those movies when one lover gives the other one the Earth’s moon-do you remember those?” he suddenly asked, pulling me to a complete stop with his hands. There was an abrupt grin plastered above his sadness and a pain in my arms-which he gripped tightly.6

“Yeah,” I reluctantly answered as he tucked a lock of red hair behind my ear. The touch was far too quick.7

“Well, I’ve been thinking: you’re too beautiful for just one,” he released my arms and threw his own toward the Heavens, “I want to give you the sky! The sun, the clouds, and every single constellation up there…” 8

“Domencio, you’re crazy!” I protested. My fingers glided to his hands and brought them to my heartbeat. “You can’t just give someone the sky.” 9

“It’s yours, anyways. I’m letting you have it all. Not just the damned moon. Everything.” 10

There was a nagging impulse after he said those words, it started with a roll of the stomach and ended with a gasp. Attraction, I thought. Groans tumbled from my own lips and they parted with longing-gaping open, ready for his taste. Breath came in ravenous sips and rushed from my pleading mouth. 11

“God damn it, kiss me!” I screeched, wrapping my hand around the back of his sweaty neck. The skin was warm to the touch and it told me one thing, the fact to drive me on: he felt this need, too. 12

Then we fell together, our bodies and lips connecting almost roughly but in the haste of our passion. My heart melted away with the world, molding together like wax. He’s worth risking this beauty, it screamed, I hope! 13

“Just one chance,” I howled, jerking my head toward the sky he’d given me. “Please don’t waste this.” His fingers traced my neck gently, riding over the bulging cords and indents. 14

“I won’t,” and with that promised, he lifted me into his arms. “In this lifetime, we only make love once with our beauty intact. Lets make this worthwhile.” 15

I felt my nerves start to tremble within the confines of my body but I wasn’t scared…this time excitement replaced it. 16

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I sat against the ridges of the willow tree’s bark, naked and struggling for composure. I clutched my chest, trying to calm the consistent thudding beneath. Weakness had enveloped me, but Domencio lay breathless with his head against my thigh. He too was bare and exposed. His slender body coated with a sheen of sweat and lounged out for anyone’s gaze to happen upon. 18

It gave me strength to see him there, my fingers running through his curly locks that were drenched in perspiration. 19

“I love you,” he admitted, blinking away the tears as I began to squirm and scream. 20

The porcelain skin, my perfectly dimpled face, it all flaked away to reveal an ugliness I didn’t think I had. The smoothness diminished into shreds of dead flesh, the stench that of a burning human. Though my nostrils have never smelled something so foul, I knew this. It moved across the surface, stealing the appealing image of a females innocence. 21

My eyes sunk away into this repulsive mask and became black holes where no life resided, no color-rather the absence of it. I could literally feel the layers falling together and forming a sticky substance that quickly dissolved into nothing. 22

My tainted lips turned gray and cold as stone-I could no longer remember the touch of my lovers kiss. It faded into the past and the senseless of my expression. 23

“Domencio!” I cried, groping for him, for reassurance. 24

“Eya, I’m still here, baby,” he said into my ear, holding me closer as the hideousness spread. “The light of our love will always shine, that’s why I gave you the sky.”

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Okay, I was inspired by lots of you last night...found a picture on google and just started writing. I sniffled a bit towards the end of this, lol. Soooo...what do you think? I'm anxious to know!

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  • Reaver Greeters member
    May 10, 2008

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    Bravo!

    This was enjoyable from top to bottom. Well described and passionate. You did well with it. Bravo!!


  • SparklingMoonlight
    May 6, 2008
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    I really enjoyed this, very descriptive and full of strong imagery and passion within. You could really feel the emotion between Domenico and Eya and how passionate they were about one another. Even though this wasn't a really long piece, it was full of details. Very symbolic and well done on this!! Thanks for entering my contest!


  • Miss Hanako Cullen
    April 4, 2008

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    This was really beautiful, an excellent view and detailed imagery. I think everyone else stole the words from me! haha, Wonderful!!


  • ForestFaery
    March 24, 2008

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    This wonderful

    this may be one of the best i've read! i loved it the wording is perfect. wonderful detail and great use of words. i wish you ludk and to keep writing.


  • viggomortensenslady
    March 22, 2008
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    WOW

    ooooooh that was so good. At first I was like "This is so good but where is it headed?" and then I realized what was going to happen if they made love.

    It was very rich in detail you used some nice metaphors. It was very original I've never read something quite like this. It was beautiful and sad yet haunting. Keep up the good work!

  • Mirror Me
    March 22, 2008

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    This is so amazing! It's beautiful! He loves her even though she is no longer beautiful.. It has so many meanings in one. So many ways to interpret it..

    AWESOME!


  • Ayesha Raees
    March 21, 2008
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    awww thats so cute
    a lovely piece i must admit!

  • Thedamned77
    March 15, 2008

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    Wow. I really loved this. It was so symbolic and beautiful. The best part was:
    The porcelain skin, my perfectly dimpled face, it all flaked away to reveal an ugliness I didn’t think I had. The smoothness diminished into shreds of dead flesh, the stench that of a burning human. Though my nostrils have never smelled something so foul, I knew this. It moved across the surface, stealing the appealing image of a females innocence.

    It's that part that says everything and it's SO symbolic of losing ones virginity. You are very insightful. This was beautifully written and just a wonderful read. On this line: passion of our haste, shouldn't it be haste of our passion? Maybe not. This was wonderful. Thank you for entering


  • IxLovexElphiex
    March 5, 2008
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    beautifully creepy picture thanks!
    this was amazing. paragraph 11 is my favorite. very nice description.
    "The light of our love will always shine, that's why I gave you the sky."
    *shiver* beautiful. beautiful beautiful.
    great great story!
    good luck!!
    ps: did i mention that this was beautiful? lol.


  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    March 5, 2008
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    That picture is oh so eerie and I love it. This story oh my gosh wow! This was told beautifully. It has so many incredible elements in it. Her transformation was... Wow! It is just beyond words how amazing this story is. Loved it! Loved it! Well done and this is just mind blowing.
    ~Joann

  • QuestionSleep
    March 4, 2008

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    okay, i have to ask: what the heck did you type in on google? O.o
    amazing stephy! i only hope one day i can write as half as good as you! man, i'm actually running out of things to say in my comments on your stuff because its all so good! i dont have a wide enough vocabulary to describe how good this is.
    i love how you write her transformation. very dark, twisted. i love it so much.


  • Jasmine Rayne
    March 4, 2008
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    Awesome!

    Damn. You make me afraid to write for fear it wouldn't even compare to the beautiful words and stories you've created! Your stories are so enticing. ^_^ I just want to keep reading. lol I wish the story didn't end, but it was an amazing write. :] Awesome!


  • sahewitt
    March 2, 2008

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    Very appealing

    You have captured young love's eternal appeal, that of longing for a newness that will stay unappeased. Good effort. Keep on writing


  • FantasyFable
    March 2, 2008

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    Ok I am creeped out!! It was dead romantic and sweet at first, with him proclaiming his love, then she turns all like monster doll on us!! "what on earth did you type into google? lol

    I am speechless at the thought of this happening, I could be wrong but I got the destinct impression that she was a virgin and with him saying "we only get to make love once in are life with are beauty in tact.." gave me this morbid feeling when she started flaking to bits that because she had now made love her beauty was basically cracking away.

    Ohh!! that was creepy, puts you off sex completely that really got to me!! *shiver*

    You described that way to well and that picture at the top just made it worse!

    I have never read description just quite as good as that! well bleeding done that was excellent it really give me quite a chill.

    Best write yet!

    Lots of love

    Cat! x x

  • anxiously D
    March 2, 2008

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    The picture you used is beautiful and yet it almost scares me. It's sort of creepy to look at :0)

    I love the dialogue in the second paragraph. It just sounded so wonderfully worded in my head as I read it. Actually, all of your dialogue came off that way.

    This line was really amazing: Breath came in ravenous sips and rushed from my pleading mouth.

    To me your writing is so mature, it's hard to believe that you are still so young. You have a great talent it seems and just think, things can only get better from here.

    Great piece, I truly enjoyed it. :0)

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Prodigious.Mirth
    March 2, 2008

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    Domencio love that name..

    This was written with such heartfelt love and beuaty it is really hard not to cry with the description and the imagery used... the scenery, just everything and the message inside his words.... such tranquil beauty..yet at the end it was such ab tear wrenching end, god it brang tears and you worded it so wonderfully... talent as its best..one of my favorites from you

    love you lovely ^_^
    Blair
    Keep that passion burning

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