Drowning

I just want to drown my sorrows
In sex and sleep
Living alone with my grief
Sleeping in darkness, crying at night
Come drown my sorrows
And stay with me tonight1

Nothing feels right
I'm always in pain
My heart aches for your touch
Your love, your rain2

I want to drown my sorrows
In sex and sleep
Crying, always crying
So come drown my sorrows
And stay with me tonight3

Tears stream down my face
Alone in this sodden darkness
Craving everything
From touch to taste to sight
Wanting to be back in your arms
And held tight4

I want to drown my sorrows
In sex and sleep
Just living alone with my grief
Crying at at night
Just come drown my sorrows
And comfort me this night.

Author notes

Hey, all. Hope you like this. It was a spur of the moment work, nothing bad happened to make this come about, lol. If anyone has an idea for a different title, I'd be grateful ^^. I'm kinda at a loss for this.

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  • Sgs
    September 14, 2008

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    I have so felt this way, many many times. I think the title is very apt for the subject matter, I wouldn't change a thing!

  • Insanitys Plea
    August 14, 2008

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    Hehehe excellent

    Tis a nice poem I shall bookmark this.Keep the good work up Leslie.Everything was smooth and the emotions were well poured into the poem itself.


  • Drac
    April 30, 2008

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    I really like this, and I feel that the title goes very well with it =)
    But the best part, I think, is that nothing bad happened to make this come about ;D
    But I must say, this was very well written, just like your other texts, that I regrettably haven't gotten around to read many of lately... It's been so long, hasn't it? Haven't talked in ages Leslie Jo!
    So well, this was a job very well done... A great and emotionally packed poem that I'm going to bookmark =)
    Well done

    ~ Mads

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.


  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    April 19, 2008

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    Wow this is really incredible and it speaks volumes. Depression sometimes can really mess with ones head, no matter what they try to do to stop it. You have portrayed it so well here.
    ~Joann


  • Adelaide Blood
    April 12, 2008

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    Wow

    That describes humans well I think... How some get so depressed all they want is to feel loved and wanted (sex) or to be away from the cruel world sleeping... sometimes forever....


  • Someday Hero. gold member
    April 11, 2008
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    Cool poem.

    Later cousin!

    ~Alex~

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