The prayer reverberated in her mind. She knew it from somewhere, but where?1
The phone rang, “hello.” 2
“Sharon, it’s me Suzi, meet me in 30 minutes at our place.” The phone went dead.3
“Who was that?” Gary asked.4
“Suzi, she’s asked me to go meet her.”5
“You think that’s wise, you feeling up to it?”6
“She sounded desperate I better go and see what’s wrong.”7
“Want me to come with you?”8
“No it’s ok, I’m sure I won’t be long.” Sharon got up and headed to the bedroom to get dressed.9
10 minutes later Sharon returned into the living room fully dressed, she had changed into her jeans and a T-shirt. “You sure you don’t want me to come with you?” Gary said while Sharon put on her running shoes. “No I’ll be okay Gary, don’t worry.” She leaned over and gave him a kiss, “I love you,” she whispered, “I won’t be long.” Gary smiled as she walked out the door.10
As the sound of the door slammed behind her, she heard a voice. “Hey Sharon, where you of to so late at night? Everything ok?” It was joy; she was dressed up short black dress, hair and make up done perfectly. She must have just got home from a date, as Sharon seen the back of a man entering her apartment. “Hi Joy, just off to see a friend, she needs a hand with something. Did you have a nice night?” Joy winked at Sharon, “I better get off, you have a nice evening.” 11
“I’m sure I will.” Joy said closing the door behind her.12
Sharon took the keys out of her bag and opened the car door. There was that uneasy feeling again it the pit of her stomach, “I hope she’s alright, please let Suzi be alright.” Saying as she started the car and pulled out of her parking space. The music played silently in the background as she drove. The roads were quiet, only a few motorists out tonight, she thought. As she pressed down on the gas a little harder.13
Sharon finally reached her destination, she saw a slumped up figure on the park bench where Suzi and her classed as “their place.” Without thinking she got out the car and called to her. “Suzi, I’m here what’s the matter.” The dark figure arose from the bench, it started to make it’s way towards the car. Head stooped low, Sharon knew there was something wrong. Suzi stopped still standing in the darkness of the trees, “Sharon come to me please, I don’t see you.” Sharon got back into the car and turned the headlights on full beam. The light was so bright it showed every morsel of the woman Sharon knew, but it wasn’t Suzi. Sharon quickly put the locks on and started the engine. Backing away, her heart was hammer a thousand beats at a time, so she thought.14
The figure slowly moved towards the car, head still stooped but looking towards Sharon, She froze; she couldn’t press her foot on the pedal to reverse away from her. Arms out stretched, the woman still walked towards the car, with such a scared look in her face. Sharon could see her lips moving, “Please” The anguish in her eyes. Sharon just sat and stared. Then suddenly she caught a glimpse of the necklace Suzi wore, Sharon had given her it for her 21st birthday. Sharon studied the woman’s face, and caught a glimmer of a familiar face in the look of freight in the old face in front of her. She also noticed blue green marks just below the left eye, blood on her lip, the torn clothes. Sharon quickly got out of the car and ran to her…15
Author notes
okay sorry for the wait guys and this is kinda crappy, waited so long to read this tripe. Soz
What did you think? Please comment!
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This is the most frightening chapter yet! I like how you've introduced another character,(Joy) which can be used later. The special "place" for Suzi and Sharon to meet is believable. This is getting creepy! Suzi is ensnared.
For a piece of tripe, as you call it, your story is holding together well. I like the plot, the characters, the subject, ect. I think a nice improvement would be to describe the physical surroundings more. This would be doable, without changing the base-line of your story.
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ye ye great write thanx for sharing!love acuna matata fro the rest of my days!
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what there's no more?
i was enjoying myself there, a good story. i hope you write and post more of this. i did some short stories myself some years ago, but i thought i was rubbish at them, they're in the lists somewhere, i then revamped them, yet to come to them for the lists.
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excellent
This has me n the edge of my seat. I am going to go and find the rest. Oh please let there be more.It would be awful to stop it here. -
Oh my I must say I cannot wait until you post more! You must notify me when the next chapter or two is up. You have done such a great job so far, brilliant absolutly brilliant.
I must read more..so suspensful, you definatly know how to hold an audience.
Sinceritamente,
VenomousScorpio
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This is definitely turning into quite a cliff hanger!!!! WOW, it gets more intriquing by each installment. I'm late getting to this and I see #14 is up, so I'm straight off to read that now!!! The suspense is killing me !!! LOL
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scared the fright out of the old women?
hey, you can't leave us hanging
hurry up with #14!!!!
rah rah rah, we need more...
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You are the master of the cliff hanger girl! Now, write more so I can find out what the heck happened to Suzi... Let me know when it is ready!
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This makes me want to continue to read on..If this is 13 there must be more so now I better go see what's happened before,lol..
I enjoyed this alot curious as to what's still to come...excellent write -
this is EXCELENT!!! I absolutely loved it! you did a great job in capturing the suspense of the whole plot there! i absoluetely was on the edge of my seat with my face glued to the screen wondering what was going to happen and who the person could be. great job i truley enjoyed! thank
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Holy shoot Nat what happened to Suzi
Lord have mercy on me I am glad you picked this up again you have got all these sub plots going and I am dying to see how this ends up
Hurry up me wants more Nat
This was a scary one
~~Dawn
PS this isn't CRAP either
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Nat I'm so glad you've continued on with your story and I wasn't disappointed with chapter 13 - unlucky for some - Suzi in this case it would seem. You've built up the suspense again so please don't make us wait too long for no. 14 will you?
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Awesome********
Nat
This is outstanding!!!!!!!!! You had me riveted to my seat!!!!!!It was a long wait, but it was worth it to me, I just jumped back in, very easily Sometimes, I read books like that, I'll lay them down, when things crazy, and them pick them back up, and once I start reading, I remember exactly where I left off 
What have you done to fire your muse up, girlfriend? I wanna borrow the secret
Karen
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