Spinature - Part two

Constable Cole peered into the shaft of the fireplace, shaking his head and muttering to himself.1

“David, they couldn’t have gotten in down the fire chute! We were all sitting right here.”2

David Cole was an old friend of the family’s, and ever since Joella’s father had died in the tragic road accident which claimed four others’ lives, they had come to know him and trust his judgement.3

“Unfortunately there’s no evidence anywhere to prove that someone actually physically entered the house – other than you of course.” He slowly perched on the edge of the seat tentatively, seemingly eyeing up Joella.4

Due to sharp eyes and a quick brain she noticed this almost immediately.5

“What are you trying to say?! That I did this? Why the hell would I kill my own boyfriend!”6

David wished instantly that he hadn’t of done or said anything. She was argumentative at the best of times, but the overwhelming feelings of torment, guilt and anger at what had happened must have had an affect on her feelings. He quickly apologised, and again wished he hadn't.7

“I don’t want your sympathy. I don’t care what you fat cats at the precinct think! I didn’t kill him! It was like how I said – he fell! An … an invisible force or something.”8

David panicked – he truly didn’t believe that Joella had killed her boyfriend – after all she was extremely close to him – but her panicky tones and overwhelming desire to prove to him that she was “innocent” made him think harder about the case. She was there, she was with him – all night. Her fingerprints were all over his body, on his shoulders, his arms, his face – his neck.9

He slowly rose to his feet. 10

“I’m gonna go talk this over with the chief. Uh – don’t worry, everything’s gonna be fine. I’ll be back to check up on you all tomorrow.”11

Joella’s mom stood to show him out,12

“Thanks a lot Dave – we appreciate you stopping by.”13

Joella’s icy stare followed David all the way home that night.14

Author notes

Remember I'm only 14!

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  • Lady Patricia
    August 5, 2003
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    oooooooooo
    I'm getting that -just-stepped-over-my-grave-feelin. She didnt do it... but that aint what David thinks. Hrm... More. MORE.. MOOOOORREE EBONY!! LOL
    I must read more. Missin you darlin.
    Missin you like hell.
    Aint heard from you in a while.
    You dont miss me do you!!! *cries*
    Ro~
    jk
    Great write.

  • puppygurl
    June 16, 2003
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    I liked it... you kept things left unsaid, unproven. There is so much that could have happened to Joella's boyfriend. Yuo are going to write more right? You have talent and I hope you keep writing! I'm looking for the rest of this so dont keep everyone waiting too long!


  • DreamWalker2
    June 15, 2003
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    teeheee! hey ebs! I lurve ur writin! it has so much depth and u dont tell the readers what the characters are feelin, you show thru their actions and that takes skill! u go girly!
    Your speach is sharp and keeps all us lazy peeps with the story line the whole time! Well it did with me neways ooo alien....
    Youre a brill writer for 14 and u only started a lil while ago. I always thought good writin toom practice but you blew that assumption right away! go u!
    I'm sure if u play ur cards right u will be a published author and will earn loadsa money...And of course u wud lend ur bezzie bud some....wudnt u? *giggles* of course u wud and if u didnt...PCHOO PCHOO PCHOO! MWUAHAHAHA

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