Last Night

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Following a trail of mystery...I went into this dark, dark land...>2

My mind flowed with imagination. I met an intriguing hynotic man. We walked along together, down a dreary and lonely trail. Stumbling over stones on the path, crossing barriers of branches that prevailed.3

The further we walked along the trail, the darker the sky become. There was no turning back at this point. Going forward was the only choice. So dumb... The path led us into a dark forest like a jungle, filled with vines and trees. THe deeper we ventured into the area the more dense it become.4

We were forced to crawl on our knees most of the time. I didn't know where this trail was going. It was frighting, and minus a goal, I held on to the hand of the strange man leading me. Not realizing he was after my soul.5

This forest appeared to be his home. I knew I had to get away, but the darker the trail become the more I was held at bay. I watched for ways to escape this man, for now he was my greatest fear. I no longer was afraid of the darkness, as much as having him near.6

We came upon a drop-off in the path. Down the side was a deep ravine. The vines hanging on the trees were spilling low to the ground. In the dark they were hardly seen.7

I started to run in the darkness, a scary choice I had to make. The man chased me in the dark, hot on my heels. He ran into a vine hanging low on the trees, causing him to lose his balance and fall into the deep ravine.8

I kept running through the darkness, trying to find a way to escape this horror of madness. To find my way through the forest to the light of day. The dark path seem to never end.9

As I ran farther away, I followed the path through the darkness and finally it started to bend. Around the bend there was a light shinning from a wrickley old shack. I knocked on the door and it opened, there in the light was my bed...What a dream.10

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My first attempt at story-write...

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  • Rheea
    May 16, 2008

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    you kept my interest from begining to end... it made me almost sick .. it was my husband and my self i had no idea until i read it here

  • Aesthete2000
    March 29, 2008

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    The words flash quickly,
    noting the desperation
    of the run. Hurrah for
    the low-hanging vine,
    giving you the advantage!
    The panic, the fear---
    all so real, and then
    the door! You captured
    the dream with intensity!!!

    Aesthete

    • A floatingleaf
      March 29, 2008
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      Aesthete ... Thanks for reading and commenting...I'm new at story-telling...hugs


  • xBitterxSweetx
    March 3, 2008
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    Interesting idea to have this 'dark man' mysterious... keeps the readers guessing. Some things that caught my attention were some of the tenses were wrong and, perhaps, the syntax (sentence structure) to be varied out a bit. Different types of syntax makes the words stand out a bit more. Good job and Thanks for entering!

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