the world is laughing at you
turn it around a laugh at them
the weight of the world is on your shoulder
you're banging on its back door
spot light is all on you
disappear into the audience
sun is setting your day
fly to the other side of the world
and thats where i'll be calling you
from the other side of the universe
and thats where i'll be calling you
calling you
calling you
to burry me
standing on the edge
just take that last step
drowning in the water now
can't seem to hold my breath
sunlight is fading
not even the after noon
not the afternoon
not the afternoon
jimmy is calling
cant hear what he says
who cares anymore
now that I'm dead
jimmy is calling
calling
calling you
from the other side
of the universe
from the other side
of the mirror
Please tell me what you think
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Well, the preview drew me in and I'm glad it did. One thing I wanna point out first thing is there's a typo in the second line.
So, as I read I was thinking yep it's ok not bad at all until I got to the middle and the rhyme sort of picked it up so that I enjoyed it better.
One thing that I didn't like, and this is just my personal taste that's all, was the line 'to save me'. That's just because I hear save me so often in popular music that it just sort of irks me whenever I hear it, you know?
Most of the time lyrics don't sound good to me if I don't know the tune that should go with it, you know, but these ones are good. I did enjoy them.
beginning: 5, language: 4, ending: 2.
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you are so right about the 'to save me line' and i kinda hated it putting it in there. but for musical flow i had to have a line there and i couldnt think of anything else. but what do ya think about me changing it from 'to save me' to 'to burry me'
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Yeah that sounds really good actually. As someone I know would say: Do it up.
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