Eighteenth Century-Chapter One

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"Bloody Hell Mariah! What the hell are you doing?" Alex screamed.
"You swear to much, Al," I pointed out, "What the hell is that about?" Alex just gave me a glare, and walked away mumbling. I shook my head and laughed. Alex was a swearing ass at times. But I'm not much better. Even in company I would swear.1

"You're supposed to be helpin' me Al! You wanna get in trouble?" I yelled after him.
"I'm comin'! I'm comin!" Came Al's voice. He walked out of our small shed with a wheel barrow. He smiled mischeviously.2

"Well, Mar," He began, "Ge' in the barrow." I looked at him like he was stupid.
"Oh well. What the Hell." I got in the barrow. Alex ran fast as possible, pushing the wheel barrow. He ran towards the lake. 3

I started to figure out what he was doing.
"No freaking way Al!" I screamed "What are you doing?" Al let go of the wheel barrow. It went into the lake with the barrow. I got up in the waist high water and screamed at him,4

"What the hell were you doin'? Marina is gonna kill me! Look how wet my dress is! This isn't the twentyfirst century anymore, Al! We'll get in trouble in the eighteenth century!"
He just laughed at me. He fell foreward while laughing right in the water. I started to laugh to. 5

"Time travel," I laughed, "Isn't good I guess. Remeber the fourteenth century?" Marina walked out to the lake and glared at us. We stopped laughing at once. luckily she didn't hear about the time travel. We would be kicked out automaticly if they knew about our time traveling ability's.

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  • UnEdibleChick
    February 24, 2008

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    Good start! It definatly caught my attention! The characters have great personalities that will hook a reader on to the story! great job! I like it!


  • Prodigious.Mirth gold member
    February 23, 2008

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    O.O ok might feel a little rushed.. gorgy pictute... Other than that I would like to know more I guess we need more..I can see the language you have chosen is a good choice for what looks to be histortian ...