“I need it.”1
“You need what?” Hamish asked as I stood outside his balcony window, trying not to fall of the room to my death.2
“I need sex.”3
Hamish grabbed me by the arms and pulled me in, letting my land on the sofa that was near the window.4
My skirt hiked up and I left it there, as I stood with my hand in his, waiting for him to say something.5
“Oh god Blair do you know humiliated you made me the other day at school?”6
I looked solemnly at him, feeling the urge to just slap him down and force him onto the bed.7
“I know and I am sorry, but I had to do something, she was going to make you stand up and show everyone that huge soldier of your at attention, think of it as a thank you for fucking me up the ass last time.”8
“Ass…” he whispered so seductively, grabbing a hold on mine.9
I jumped as he spanked me a little harder, and hiked up my school skirt till It was past my waist.10
“You want to be Blair or Blake tonight baby?”11
Why did he have to ruin the moment? For once could Hamish just not let something be?12
“I dunno Hamish you tell me, do I look hard tonight or am are my panties completely dripping and soaking wet with arousal.”13
He moved his hands forward, placing them between his crutch and mine.14
Pinching my clit through my panties, I leaked a little soaking it through onto his dry fingers.15
“Mmm definitely a girl tonight.16
I frowned, trying to push him away, but he continued to pinch.17
“Oh… Hamish no. No I can’t I’m not a girl remember.”18
Laughing he slipped a finger deep into my panties, pushing it into my pussy.19
“well you sure could have fooled me.”
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Oh god I hope this is not awfull writing ....
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Your writing is NOT awfull, it is great. This could speak to so many people.
And I think Blair/Blake should get everything s/he wants in one night and Hamish shouldn't have to ask.
Blair/Blake should not be afraid to ask for what s/he would like either.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Well, Hamish is not being very nice!
Blair's obviously trying to find herself, and he's just ruining it all. I hate him! AH!
It seems a bit rushed, but hey, it's good
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Awww I agree with Selene there this is not an awful writing I think its really good it speaks out so much I can feel the pain that other guy is being a creep way he is doing I love how all the emotions is pouring out in this please keep it coming I cant wait for part 9
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Sweetie, don't be silly! This is not awful writing. I think this chapter really shows what she is going through and how she feels. That man is a prick the way he is acting. You are doing such a good job at this story.
I love all of the emotions that are coming out in it and I can't wait to read more of this!
~Joann
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Not at all this shows the struggle that Blair is goign thre trying to find him or herself as more of a definded sex. Blairs man isn't really helping her discover what she/he really wants to be.
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