wondering

there are somethings that i have always wondered about
like why you are such and asshole
and why you admitting it makes me want you even more
like why you say you believe in god
and then do such unholy things
like why you lookED at me like you were never going to see me again
and then NOW you won't even look at me
like why you say you don't really believe in the devil
when you've seen me face to face
like why seeing you every day and seeing where you live everyday
makes me want die
like why you would hurt me after promising you never would
and how in the world were you the one that knew me better than anyone
more than i knew myself
and like why when i told you i was going to take my life
you just stood there1

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  • the shorty
    February 19, 2008

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    commas, shmomas, that was good. i think it helps that i know who you're talking about, the butthead...


    • lexiconsthedevil
      February 19, 2008
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      thanks. i know i read it after i got the commas thing and i don't think that they were necessary. and since when have i been known to use punctuation! i dont even capitalize anything!


  • anxiously D
    February 18, 2008

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    That last line is really powerful. The rest is alright but a lot of it is sort of jumbled and a little difficult to follow since you didn't use any commas.