It

In 1971 my family and I moved from a small town in New Jersey to Washington DC. I was fifteen and ready for new adventures. I made friends quickly. My new groups of friends were older than I by one or two years and were eager to take me under their wing. Most of them had steady boyfriends and were doing it regularly with them. The truth be known, I had never done it, but would never tell my new cool friends that. So instead, I made up a boyfriend from back home. I named him Roger. Roger and I really liked doing it. We did it all the time. As a matter of fact Roger and I were doing it machines.1

One of my new girlfriends Kelly thought I must miss doing it and set me up on a blind date. The plan was that her boyfriend Tommy and she would take me to meet him on Saturday night. My blind date’s name was Kirk. His father had a big boat docked in Manassas, Virginia and that is where we would meet.2

I was really excited about my blind date, but worried about my lack of experience. Up to that point I had been kissed once on lips and been felt up once under my jacket and over two sweaters, when Billy knocked me down on the ice last winter. If I was going to be a good blind date I needed more information, I poured through my Teen magazines hoping to find some guidance. The only thing I found out there was Bobby Sherman's likes and dislikes. I practiced kissing the top of my hand, giving hickeys to my arm, and kissing my Bam Bam doll’s hard lips. It was all I had to go on.3

Saturday night finally arrived. I put on my lowest hip huggers and sheerest halter-top. I added a jeans jacket over those, so my father would let me out of the house. On the ride to the boat dock I found out that Kirk was a minister’s son. Kelly told me minister’s sons were always wild and I could expect an exciting night. Kirk was waiting at the beginning of the pier when we arrived. He greeted me with a warm smile and a hand shake.4

It was a beautiful moonlit summer night as we sat on the dock making conversation and drinking Yago Sangria wine. After awhile Kelly and Tommy excused themselves and went down into the cabin of the docked boat. It didn’t take long before the boat was rocking back and forth in the water.5

Kirk and I laughed at the rocking boat and then he put his arm around me and kissed me. It was a good kiss and I was ready for a lot more. When the kiss was over he turned away. My mind was racing. Was I a lousy kisser? When he turned back to me, I saw he was crying.6

“What’s wrong?” I asked.7

“I’m having sinful thoughts about you,” he mumbled, unable to look me in the eye. 8

I was stunned by his response. I didn’t know what to say. Teen Magazine didn’t cover this subject at all.9

“We can just talk," I said, touching him softly on his shoulder.
"We don’t have to do anything else. It’s okay. Please don’t cry.”10

He looked relieved and that’s what we did. Finally the boat stopped rocking. Kelly and Tommy came back out and it was time to leave.11

On the way back home Tommy got lost and I was late getting home. My father was up waiting for me. He didn’t get angry when I told him why I was late and asked me if I had a good time. I wanted to tell him how disappointed I was that I didn’t get laid, but I couldn’t do that. So I said I had a nice time and never told anyone for years about poor Kirk’s dilemma.12

That year Kelly had to drop out of school because she was expecting. Another girl from the group had an abortion. I began to see that it could really complicate your life. After that I put it on hold for a few more years and I guess I have Kirk to thank for that.13

Through the years I was set up on so many blind dates that I should have been issued a seeing eye dog, but this was the most memorable one. 14

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  • Glitflyer
    November 17
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    Nice..
    A way to tell teens that we're not adviced to do the "it"
    Great Write..
    I'd love to consider you as a finalist but your story does not contain a quote...

    Anyway, Good Job!!!
    And good Luck in my contest!
    Keep postin'


  • beautynduty
    May 14

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    wonderful

    good read very good one. i like the whole idea of having to wait for 'it' cos it really complicates in the end 9if ur not married). thanks for entering. all the best


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    November 8, 2008
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    Hi

    This story is being considered for inclusion in a Storywrite anthology we hope to publish. If you would like this story to be considered, please apply to this group:

    http://storywrite.com/group/info/Storywrite%20Anthology%20Volume%20One?stay=1

    Andy


  • Valkyrie silver member
    October 29, 2008

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    Oh awesome story! So, in the end it was a good thing your blind date was with the PK? Nice twist, on the 70's attitude. I love the way you wrote this; it's very easy to read.

  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    Good Story!

    I'm a little unconventional from an adult's perspective. I don't think teenage sex is such a bad thing, but I do believe that it should be under parental guidance and with safe sex practices. Not Society's view, I'm sure. I'm glad that you didn't have an unwanted pregnancy.

    In my personal experience, I didn't have coitus until I was 18 and it was with a young woman of 23. I didn't tell her she was my first and she didn't ask.

    I enjoyed this story and it is well told.

    Thanks for entering Exceptional Stories To Be Published - 2.

    Andy


  • TNTrouble
    September 19, 2008

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    Interesting. A bit too innocent for My personal taste...but very well written and realistic nontheless.


  • Cecilia Marlana
    September 3, 2008

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    LUST! Incredible choice! One of my favorites! I am right aren't I? ha ha...anyway. I loved this story. I like the "It" part.


  • Melli
    August 25, 2008
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    "doing “it” machines" really made me laugh.

    This was a very good piece!!!! Good job. It was sort of light and funny, but had some serious parts also. I liked it verry much. It was well written and had moral. Which is always good, unless iss always good unless i dont agree with it. Haha, just kidding. anyways, good job!!! And good luck.

    KEEP WRITING!!!

    -Melli<33


  • Vanilla King
    August 14, 2008

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    What a nice story, I like the message and how you described it through experiences! I don't know if this happened to you, but you sure did a good job telling the story!

    It's funny how you mention the teen magazine, how you turn to it for sex-advice and how it hadn't mentioned anything about how you should cope with a conversation. It's one of the many things that's wrong with society these days.. everything is about sex, sex, sex! Even young teens are getting spammed with sex!

    I really like your story and the things it points out. Thank you very much for entering!


  • moonwriter
    June 17, 2008

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    That was really, really great. It was cute, sweet, and really amusing. I loved how well-written, detailed, and fun this was. And it even had a moral, too. Beautiful job! I wish you luck in any contest you might enter. This is a gorgeous story.

    Now here's my question. Was this a true story? It sounded as if it could be.


  • Glow in The Dark
    June 14, 2008

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    That was...amazing! It's so nice! I thought tis was gonna be discusting, but the ending surprised me!
    Good luck!


  • Asonine
    May 27, 2008

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    Very nicely done. when I read merely the title "it" I really thought it was " it going to be "it" "it", you know, the normal, classic 'I gt laid five times today, then I forced some poor unsure guy to have sex with me' sort of thing, I have read one tomany stories like that, so you can emagine how surprised I was when no one got laid

    Freedom.


  • EtherealButterfly
    May 2, 2008
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    This is really really sweet!!!! I thought that at first it was going to be a monster story (idk where I mighta got that idea...maybe SK's IT lolz) but I was still pleasantly surprised by it! I actually liked it a lot!!!! And the "I'm having sinful thoughts about you." made me laugh!!! Good job!!!!! I loved it!!!!


  • iliad
    March 6, 2008

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    Awww

    And I thought I was the only one who tried to practice by kissing my hand! I liked this. My favorite part, obviously was where you talked about how you were trying to get ready. This felt like a sidebar, and I wanted it to be an editorial. I wanted to hear more of your conversation with kirk. There were a lot of chances here to add some nice natural humor, (with the kissing, the conversation, maybe an added conversation she might have had with a girlfriend) but all that aside, I thought this was a charming little story. "I poured through the teen magazine magazines." I see you never fixed that. You should. Other than that, nice work.


  • misskris712
    February 22, 2008
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    i am sorry i didnt do your ratings, so im adding them in

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 3.

  • misskris712
    February 22, 2008

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    very real and tangible

    I liked your story because it is very easy to relate to. "it" was a good way to put it and "it" can easily complicate your life like you said. It was short but very descriptive. Great job!

    beginning: 5.


  • Kat222
    February 22, 2008

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    i think you should change the sentence to 'I poured through old/back issues of Teen Magaizine' this keeps you from having to use the word magazine twice in the same sentence. doesnt sound right. you left out the word 'get' in 'didn't get laid' you know i really enjoyed this one. very nicely told and held my attetnion the entire time(except when my phone rang lo) besides the few mistakes i mentioned i think this was excellent. Great Job!


  • Viola.King
    February 22, 2008

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    Wow, that story really had a great message! I had a feeling it would end up being a true story...it just seemed so real. Make sure that you make a new paragraph when there's a new speaker being quoted.

    A change in paragraph 6, line 6: add a semicolon or a period after the word OK (or you can change it to "okay") so that the quotation is "It's okay; please don't cry" or "It's okay. Please don't cry."

    Oh, and the first word of the story, 1971, is kind of on its own. You could put the word "in" before the year, or you could put a dash after it to separate it from the rest of the sentence, so it's "1971 - my family and I moved from a small town in New Jersey to Washington DC."

    One other edit, in paragraph 4, line 1: add the word "my" before "lowest hip huggers", or change the word "lowest" to "low" and don't add the word "my". Again, your choice.

    Thanks for sharing this personal story with storywrite! I really enjoyed it.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 3, characters: 4.


  • lexiconsthedevil
    February 22, 2008

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    this is soo cool! i like that it was a true story. and i liked how you told a whole story without it being very long. this told you everything you needed to know without a lot of fluff! great write!!


  • Gary Alexander silver member
    February 19, 2008

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    Beautiful!

    Hey! This is a really sweet and charming story...and nicely written...even for a boy to read! Very nicely done. Great, perfect combination of funny and touching! Couple of things, please...just to make it perfect?
    Par 2: "her boyfriend Tommy and SHE"
    Par 1: "groups of friends were older than I" (you have older than me)
    Par 6: "What's wrong?" (You have an extraneous "I")
    Par 6: 4th line from bottom: you have: "We do don't"
    Par 6: line 6...you have "...having sinful thoughts ABOUT" (about what?)
    Otherwise lovely. Very funny in spots! "IT"...was very funny! And the line about what you really wanted to tell your father was the best!
    GA


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