The Dark One Angel1
Prologue2
He was the Dark one Angel.3
My heart fluttered and swirled and my insides tingled with joy.4
“Oh Darkness sweep across me, take me whole, consume me, bask me in your glory.”5
I took the Angels hand, as he carried me home. As he lifted me high into the air.6
“Queen of Darkness I could think of nothing better than freeing you tonight.”7
In his arms, the warmness soon crept its way into my seemingly cold body. The ice that had kept my heart in captivity crackled and chipped away, as the fire in our desire heated up.8
Until we reached our final destination I lay my head in his shoulder, my back arched by his tight, loving embrace. 9
His wings wrapping themselves around my naked body as his fingertips found there way to the magical spot that made me cry in Ecstasy.10
“Scream for your master,” he groaned seductively, sinking his angelic vampire teeth into my snow white flesh.11
The shock of that powerful surge, the orgasmic feeling of his lips upon my open wound as he lapped up my precious blood was enough to cast me into a sense of seclusion for eternity in his eyes.12
The Dark One Angel Part one 13
In the darkness she sat alone on the cold steps outside her house.14
Breathing in deeply, breathing in the hurt and suffering she had just encountered.15
Nothing could make up for what had just happened to her, nothing would be able to drown the tears away in the midnight sky.16
Along the footpath a hooded figure made his way closer towards her.17
She looked up, not caring at all if he was about to harm her. Nothing could account to the pain she was already feeling. She probably would not even mind if he tore her apart.18
Instead the hooded figure stopped short in front of her crumpled body and got down on his knees. Sliding his hand under her chin, bringing it into the light that shone from the street lights.19
Her tears remained and fell, slowly trickling down her nose. Her body had become frozen with his touch.20
“Let me take you away fair maiden,” he whispered, musically almost sensually as his hand lowered down to rest lightly on her shoulders.21
She felt a wave, a feeling she had never felt before something that of hope, of acceptance, of love.22
“Who are you,” she asked nervously trying desperately to sink into his touch, to embrace his warmness instead of her body replacing it with fear.23
“I am the Dark one, the Dark Angel, destined to save you, to love you and to keep you safe, I am Ben.”24
The Dark One Angel Part Two25
That night she almost slept soundly for once in her life.26
Everything felt tranquil and peaceful, like she could finally close her eyes and feel safe knowing that nothing could harm her.27
It was as if she could feel his pleasant eyes watching over her, sweeping his power of protection across her, letting her know that nothing bad was going to happen. It would be alright, she would wake up after her slumber unharmed.28
In the morning the sun washed itself around her refreshed body.29
She experienced the sensation of sleep in her eyes, the crusty bits of sand from the sand man made her smile, as she wiped it from the corner of her eyes.30
The bedroom door swung open, her guardian stood in the door way. His face full of anger and age and she knew what was coming. 31
Could she have been so wrong about her Angel? Maybe he had been a figment of her imagination, a part of her delusional sate of mind. How could she have been such a fool to put her faith in something so strongly?32
Rage infuriated the man, he unbuckled his belt, walking angrily over to her, forcing her hand on him.33
Then something pulled him back, the most dangerous shot of pain swirled its way around his body. Like a knife had been forced into his spine and every inch of his bad soul was being freed and destroyed.34
She watched amazed as he squirmed, clutching his stomach, falling on his knees. In a crumpled heap of the floor. Crying in agony.35
The noise was enough to be heard by her Mother, who ran into the room to see the dilemma.36
Seeing her lover in agony on the floor she bent down almost immediately, wrapping her arms around him.37
“What have you done to him You animal?” she cried, trying to help him up.38
“Nothing compared to what he was about to do to me,” she replied, jumping of her bed, making her way out of the room and outside the house.39
Although it killed her to know that even her own Mother insisted she was the child of the devil, that she was the animal. It did not seem to worry her as much as before.40
For her angel had been her savior, and she longed for the warmness of his embrace more than anything she had ever longed for in her lonely existence.41
The Dark One Angel Part Three42
Another day rolled around.43
The rush of the week had left her deep in thoughts of her depression.44
Her Mother had long ago dismissed her love for her own daughter, and she was more than alright with that.45
He had not tried to abuse her again, still remaining in agony. He was convinced it had been her touch.46
It was Friday when she arrived home, another dark day gone by. 47
Her life floating by, her life passing her by in a whirlpool of unanswered questions and desperation.48
On the doorstep wrapped in silken, Black fabric a small box lay. No name, no address. Just a box covered in the most smoothest, finest material.49
She unwrapped the box, carefully placing the silk on the door step, and took a deep breath opening the box, slowly and cautiously.50
She could hear her mother screaming at her lover, screaming for him to leave her alone, to stop it to stop hurting her.51
She deserved it, she deserved to know what pain was, even though those feeling made her guilty. She needed to understand how she felt every day of her life. So alone and so afraid, wishing death would creep closer, but being to afraid to take actions into her own hand.52
Lifting the small cardboard lid, she closed her eyes, waiting for the bomb to explode and end it all.53
Instead wrapped in Crimson, mesh fabric a pendant lay, sparkling in the sunlight. Its stone, scarlet, Ruby with beauty, the kind of beauty masked inside fairy tales. The pendant was that of a heart that hung on a silver chain.54
She placed the box on the stairs taking the pendant from out of the box and held it up on the air.55
“It will keep you safe My fair maiden,” a voice whispered sweetly through the air, wrapping itself around her body.56
She breathed it in, she took the voice and let it pass throughout her whole body. Filling her up with a strong sense of awareness and hope.57
She pulled her hair back behind her shoulders, her mid length chocolate brown hair. It felt as if he was there, as if he was sliding his hands around her waist, holding her close, breathing his hot, warm breath onto her skin. She loved the sensation.58
She clipped the pendant together, letting it hang of her neck. She looked elegant, she looked so beautiful despite her hash snow white skin that lay haggard of her bones.59
“It will bind us together my maiden, with this pendant you will always feel me near, I will always be close to you, if you need me call me and I will be there,” the voice whispered, laying a kiss upon her lips.60
Bringing her hand to them, she ran her finger across them. Had that been real, the kiss?61
“I will never be far, just call for me my love.”62
The Dark One Angel Part Four63
“Where did you get that necklace from?” he Mother screamed as she stepped into the door.64
Still holding it between her fingertips she tried to dodge the question by walking is not her room.65
He pulled her back violently, pushing her against the wall.66
“I think your Mother asked you a question you ungrateful little shit,” he cried, digging his nails deeply into her arm.67
Wincing she let her necklace go, looking into her Mothers eyes. 68
How could she let him do this to her every day, every night, every chance he got? Could she not see her scars that lay so plainly embedded in her skin.69
“I found it on the doorstep, It was on the doorstep so I picked it up.”70
Her Mother eyes grew wider.71
“Well you little snitch, it was for me not for you, take it of.”72
She shook her head, wrapping her fingers tightly around the pendant again.73
“No it is for me, he said so, he told me it would keep me safe.”74
Raising her eyebrow, she ushered her lover to let me go.75
“Who said that?” she asked almost seeming generally interested.76
The Dark One Angel Part Five77
Her Mother sat in the kitchen, the pendant hanging of her wrinkled. Ugly neck.78
She twisted it around her fingers, making sure her daughter knew who was boss.79
She could not let anyone over rider her beauty with such a valuable piece of jewelery. 80
She Her would show them bitched down at the club what real beauty was, what real elegance was. She would show them all.81
Anguish surrounded Her daughter, as she shoved spoonful after spoonful after spoonful of dry oats, wishing with every bit that they could be replaced with deadly razor blades.82
“You might want to hurry up, your going to miss the bus eating like the retard that you are.”83
Smashing her hand on the table she picked up the bowl throwing it against the wall.84
“Have a nice day,” she said to her mother, as she looked down, shocked at the kitchen floor.85
He walked past her, grabbing her arm.86
“Get in the car and don't say a word to your Mother,” he said, brutality in his eyes.87
Not wanting to endorse another beating as her body was battered and bruised enough, she followed his command. Making her way outside and into the car.88
Was he dropping her of at school, being nice for once in his life? Could she hope? For deep inside there was evil in his eyes, there was something she knew that was coming but wanted to deny it with every thought she could to release her fear.89
A few minutes passed, as he opened the car door and hoped into the drivers seat.90
His hand slid, under her school skirt, and he grinned, pinching the part of her that she had tried so desperately to keep away from him.91
“Are you ready for a busy day then?” he chuckled coldly, the engine warming up as he started to pinch it harder causing her immense pain throughout her whole body.92
“Save me, help me,” she whispered in her head to her Angel, trying to block out the pain.93
“Answer me bitch,” he said smacking her in the back of my head, causing her ears to ring.94
She nodded, as he slid his hand deeper, pulling out of the drive way.95
“Good, cause you better be ready for one hell of a day.”96
The Dark One Angel Part Six97
In a cabin deep within the snow peaked mountains of the darkness, Dark Angel lay in his coffin, his eyes closed in a mortal state of sleep.98
“Save me, help me,” A voice seemed to whisper from far away, yet it was so loud it seemed to send a chill through his body.99
“Marie...,” she cried immediately sitting up, his wings beginning to spread in fright.100
He used his visions to scope the land in hope of channeling a vision of Marie.101
He soon found it, a mere two hours away on a highway towards the cabin in the mountains.102
He felt aware of metal, like some kind of sharp object was hiding somewhere in the car.103
Trying even harder to scope and look deeper into his vision he could see a knife hidden beneath the mans pants. His hand hidden disgustingly under her clothing.104
Bitterness hit him high, vengeance he wished to seek, to save his lover.105
Extending his fangs with passion, he flew his coffin door closed and headed towards the clouds in hope of rescuing his lover.106
The sky was harsh, the sun was at its highest peak.107
Though with the power of love screaming through every inch of his body, the sun was nothing compared to the pain he would feel if he did not risk his life to save her.108
His Queen, his Dark Angel.109
To Be Continued...
Prologue2
He was the Dark one Angel.3
My heart fluttered and swirled and my insides tingled with joy.4
“Oh Darkness sweep across me, take me whole, consume me, bask me in your glory.”5
I took the Angels hand, as he carried me home. As he lifted me high into the air.6
“Queen of Darkness I could think of nothing better than freeing you tonight.”7
In his arms, the warmness soon crept its way into my seemingly cold body. The ice that had kept my heart in captivity crackled and chipped away, as the fire in our desire heated up.8
Until we reached our final destination I lay my head in his shoulder, my back arched by his tight, loving embrace. 9
His wings wrapping themselves around my naked body as his fingertips found there way to the magical spot that made me cry in Ecstasy.10
“Scream for your master,” he groaned seductively, sinking his angelic vampire teeth into my snow white flesh.11
The shock of that powerful surge, the orgasmic feeling of his lips upon my open wound as he lapped up my precious blood was enough to cast me into a sense of seclusion for eternity in his eyes.12
The Dark One Angel Part one 13
In the darkness she sat alone on the cold steps outside her house.14
Breathing in deeply, breathing in the hurt and suffering she had just encountered.15
Nothing could make up for what had just happened to her, nothing would be able to drown the tears away in the midnight sky.16
Along the footpath a hooded figure made his way closer towards her.17
She looked up, not caring at all if he was about to harm her. Nothing could account to the pain she was already feeling. She probably would not even mind if he tore her apart.18
Instead the hooded figure stopped short in front of her crumpled body and got down on his knees. Sliding his hand under her chin, bringing it into the light that shone from the street lights.19
Her tears remained and fell, slowly trickling down her nose. Her body had become frozen with his touch.20
“Let me take you away fair maiden,” he whispered, musically almost sensually as his hand lowered down to rest lightly on her shoulders.21
She felt a wave, a feeling she had never felt before something that of hope, of acceptance, of love.22
“Who are you,” she asked nervously trying desperately to sink into his touch, to embrace his warmness instead of her body replacing it with fear.23
“I am the Dark one, the Dark Angel, destined to save you, to love you and to keep you safe, I am Ben.”24
The Dark One Angel Part Two25
That night she almost slept soundly for once in her life.26
Everything felt tranquil and peaceful, like she could finally close her eyes and feel safe knowing that nothing could harm her.27
It was as if she could feel his pleasant eyes watching over her, sweeping his power of protection across her, letting her know that nothing bad was going to happen. It would be alright, she would wake up after her slumber unharmed.28
In the morning the sun washed itself around her refreshed body.29
She experienced the sensation of sleep in her eyes, the crusty bits of sand from the sand man made her smile, as she wiped it from the corner of her eyes.30
The bedroom door swung open, her guardian stood in the door way. His face full of anger and age and she knew what was coming. 31
Could she have been so wrong about her Angel? Maybe he had been a figment of her imagination, a part of her delusional sate of mind. How could she have been such a fool to put her faith in something so strongly?32
Rage infuriated the man, he unbuckled his belt, walking angrily over to her, forcing her hand on him.33
Then something pulled him back, the most dangerous shot of pain swirled its way around his body. Like a knife had been forced into his spine and every inch of his bad soul was being freed and destroyed.34
She watched amazed as he squirmed, clutching his stomach, falling on his knees. In a crumpled heap of the floor. Crying in agony.35
The noise was enough to be heard by her Mother, who ran into the room to see the dilemma.36
Seeing her lover in agony on the floor she bent down almost immediately, wrapping her arms around him.37
“What have you done to him You animal?” she cried, trying to help him up.38
“Nothing compared to what he was about to do to me,” she replied, jumping of her bed, making her way out of the room and outside the house.39
Although it killed her to know that even her own Mother insisted she was the child of the devil, that she was the animal. It did not seem to worry her as much as before.40
For her angel had been her savior, and she longed for the warmness of his embrace more than anything she had ever longed for in her lonely existence.41
The Dark One Angel Part Three42
Another day rolled around.43
The rush of the week had left her deep in thoughts of her depression.44
Her Mother had long ago dismissed her love for her own daughter, and she was more than alright with that.45
He had not tried to abuse her again, still remaining in agony. He was convinced it had been her touch.46
It was Friday when she arrived home, another dark day gone by. 47
Her life floating by, her life passing her by in a whirlpool of unanswered questions and desperation.48
On the doorstep wrapped in silken, Black fabric a small box lay. No name, no address. Just a box covered in the most smoothest, finest material.49
She unwrapped the box, carefully placing the silk on the door step, and took a deep breath opening the box, slowly and cautiously.50
She could hear her mother screaming at her lover, screaming for him to leave her alone, to stop it to stop hurting her.51
She deserved it, she deserved to know what pain was, even though those feeling made her guilty. She needed to understand how she felt every day of her life. So alone and so afraid, wishing death would creep closer, but being to afraid to take actions into her own hand.52
Lifting the small cardboard lid, she closed her eyes, waiting for the bomb to explode and end it all.53
Instead wrapped in Crimson, mesh fabric a pendant lay, sparkling in the sunlight. Its stone, scarlet, Ruby with beauty, the kind of beauty masked inside fairy tales. The pendant was that of a heart that hung on a silver chain.54
She placed the box on the stairs taking the pendant from out of the box and held it up on the air.55
“It will keep you safe My fair maiden,” a voice whispered sweetly through the air, wrapping itself around her body.56
She breathed it in, she took the voice and let it pass throughout her whole body. Filling her up with a strong sense of awareness and hope.57
She pulled her hair back behind her shoulders, her mid length chocolate brown hair. It felt as if he was there, as if he was sliding his hands around her waist, holding her close, breathing his hot, warm breath onto her skin. She loved the sensation.58
She clipped the pendant together, letting it hang of her neck. She looked elegant, she looked so beautiful despite her hash snow white skin that lay haggard of her bones.59
“It will bind us together my maiden, with this pendant you will always feel me near, I will always be close to you, if you need me call me and I will be there,” the voice whispered, laying a kiss upon her lips.60
Bringing her hand to them, she ran her finger across them. Had that been real, the kiss?61
“I will never be far, just call for me my love.”62
The Dark One Angel Part Four63
“Where did you get that necklace from?” he Mother screamed as she stepped into the door.64
Still holding it between her fingertips she tried to dodge the question by walking is not her room.65
He pulled her back violently, pushing her against the wall.66
“I think your Mother asked you a question you ungrateful little shit,” he cried, digging his nails deeply into her arm.67
Wincing she let her necklace go, looking into her Mothers eyes. 68
How could she let him do this to her every day, every night, every chance he got? Could she not see her scars that lay so plainly embedded in her skin.69
“I found it on the doorstep, It was on the doorstep so I picked it up.”70
Her Mother eyes grew wider.71
“Well you little snitch, it was for me not for you, take it of.”72
She shook her head, wrapping her fingers tightly around the pendant again.73
“No it is for me, he said so, he told me it would keep me safe.”74
Raising her eyebrow, she ushered her lover to let me go.75
“Who said that?” she asked almost seeming generally interested.76
The Dark One Angel Part Five77
Her Mother sat in the kitchen, the pendant hanging of her wrinkled. Ugly neck.78
She twisted it around her fingers, making sure her daughter knew who was boss.79
She could not let anyone over rider her beauty with such a valuable piece of jewelery. 80
She Her would show them bitched down at the club what real beauty was, what real elegance was. She would show them all.81
Anguish surrounded Her daughter, as she shoved spoonful after spoonful after spoonful of dry oats, wishing with every bit that they could be replaced with deadly razor blades.82
“You might want to hurry up, your going to miss the bus eating like the retard that you are.”83
Smashing her hand on the table she picked up the bowl throwing it against the wall.84
“Have a nice day,” she said to her mother, as she looked down, shocked at the kitchen floor.85
He walked past her, grabbing her arm.86
“Get in the car and don't say a word to your Mother,” he said, brutality in his eyes.87
Not wanting to endorse another beating as her body was battered and bruised enough, she followed his command. Making her way outside and into the car.88
Was he dropping her of at school, being nice for once in his life? Could she hope? For deep inside there was evil in his eyes, there was something she knew that was coming but wanted to deny it with every thought she could to release her fear.89
A few minutes passed, as he opened the car door and hoped into the drivers seat.90
His hand slid, under her school skirt, and he grinned, pinching the part of her that she had tried so desperately to keep away from him.91
“Are you ready for a busy day then?” he chuckled coldly, the engine warming up as he started to pinch it harder causing her immense pain throughout her whole body.92
“Save me, help me,” she whispered in her head to her Angel, trying to block out the pain.93
“Answer me bitch,” he said smacking her in the back of my head, causing her ears to ring.94
She nodded, as he slid his hand deeper, pulling out of the drive way.95
“Good, cause you better be ready for one hell of a day.”96
The Dark One Angel Part Six97
In a cabin deep within the snow peaked mountains of the darkness, Dark Angel lay in his coffin, his eyes closed in a mortal state of sleep.98
“Save me, help me,” A voice seemed to whisper from far away, yet it was so loud it seemed to send a chill through his body.99
“Marie...,” she cried immediately sitting up, his wings beginning to spread in fright.100
He used his visions to scope the land in hope of channeling a vision of Marie.101
He soon found it, a mere two hours away on a highway towards the cabin in the mountains.102
He felt aware of metal, like some kind of sharp object was hiding somewhere in the car.103
Trying even harder to scope and look deeper into his vision he could see a knife hidden beneath the mans pants. His hand hidden disgustingly under her clothing.104
Bitterness hit him high, vengeance he wished to seek, to save his lover.105
Extending his fangs with passion, he flew his coffin door closed and headed towards the clouds in hope of rescuing his lover.106
The sky was harsh, the sun was at its highest peak.107
Though with the power of love screaming through every inch of his body, the sun was nothing compared to the pain he would feel if he did not risk his life to save her.108
His Queen, his Dark Angel.109
To Be Continued...
Author notes
I know this is broken down as well ...
But I thought I might make it also so if a person just wants to read it in one fowl swoop they can
But if you could...Please comment on the overall peice
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Comments
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wow.
So amazing. This is my second time reading it and i'm still blown away.
but you really need to edit.I said it before(i think) and i'm saying again; it's the only problem in this story.
Anyway, please finish it! i want to read more!. Rewarded 4
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wow!excellent story. very descriptive and very well written
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Great love story
Not your basic one but surely a true love. It would be nice to see the old bastard writhing on the floor again. Well...both of the old bastards. Good descriptive passages to set the scenes but limited enough to be effective.

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This story is very well written and very good you go girl.
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This story was well-written and created some great images.
But you really need to edit. -
It's very visual. I can't help seeing the story play out in my head as a heavily stylized animation of just black and white, with only spots of red for blood and the pendant, with harpsichord being played in the background.
However, with the focus so heavily on the action, the characters are left rather shallow. The evil parental figures are just generic evil parental figures, like from a fairy tale, and the main character... well, I can't really say anything about the main character as she comes across as just a faceless protagonist without distinguishing features.. Rewarded 8
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Over all I feel there are too many paragrah breaks. Try to remember the rule of 5. 5 sentences per paragraph. Unless someone talks then it's ok and makes logical sence. Then you have also the Two worded sentences. Example Ugly Neck. This should be part of the previous sentence. other then those things fantastic write.


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