"Say cheese!"1
But in that split-second, between the ring of your voice and the flash of the camera - My smile falters, the corners of my lips turn down. My eyes lose a little of their shine, a little of the life they bottled in. My face falls; so does my heart. Just then, the camera snaps away at my soul.2
Because, in that split-second, I realise:3
I don't love you anymore.
Author notes
I was looking at the picture for the competition, and I thought of how ironic it'd be if someone loved you and was genuinely smiling, yet you no longer love that person and can't smile.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired........or other things! by J-Menz223.
350 points, ended March 8, 2008, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think!
Comments
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Love it!
That is the best, shortest short story I've read in a long time. In four lines, you've captured everything needed for a good story (except dialog, of course . Amazing. Keep on writing!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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aww that's so bittersweet good job
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