Why can't you see?
Please, please tell me.1
I tell you - I'm screaming out for help.
I show all the warning signs.
So why can't you see?2
I'm not okay -
Why can't you see that?3
I'm practically yelling "I'm dying..."
And crying in front of your eyes,
So why don't you see?4
Why can't you see?
Please, please tell me,
Showing my problems is the key,
Do you not completely agree?
So why don't you see?5
I'm not okay -
Let me know when you understand that.
Author notes
Uhm.
True, as always.
The title is a My Chem song, but the poem isn't based on that song. Just thought it made a good title.
A contest entry
- Poetry and short stories by UnEdibleChick.
315 points, ended April 8, 2008, 29 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me the truth. Does it suck?
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Heartbreaking...
Beautiful, incredibly written, but truly heartbreaking...
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Why are you doing this to me again?
But really. Thank you, my love.
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Because I love your poetry.
Forever welcome, mon ange.
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Songs like a song too
Just kidding. 
This is a nice song, but I asked for Poems and short stories, and I still get a few songs I'm kidding. This is nice. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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I hope I haven't done that o.0
Your poems are so heartbreaking!
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Good
None of ur peoms suck.
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i'm sorry that you're not okay. may a bit of light shine through the DARKness and beam into your life so that it may sparkle once again, DARK.
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It's written very well with a strong message but I hope it's not true. It's odd that I read this tonight because I just got over an altercation that kind of relates just minutes ago. In fact it's still going on but there's nothing more I can do tonight.
I don't know you and I don't know if this is spoken from the heart and you truly do need help but let me say this anyways for it may be beneficial to others.
Why not just get the help you need for yourself? Bear with me as I use a rather lame metaphor but when I'm in danger of failing a class I don't wait for the teacher or fellow student to single me out and shove the help I need down my throat...I go directly to the teacher and seek the particular help I need.
Sorry if I sound like I'm preaching and sorry if this doesn't relate at all but the occassions so fresh in my mind that I feel as if I must speak my true feelings.
Good luck to all. -
sounds like a song christina aguilera would singg!! its really nice Taylor! i enjoyed it. but its so true too!! i can like totally relate to this! love it
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The song title was enough to make me sing the song in my head.
"Well if you wanted honesty that's all you had to say." I'm NOt Okay (I promie) by My Sexy Chem. Haha.
I love MCR. Emily's gonna go into her My Chem land.
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