Veil of Sadness

VEIL OF SADNESS1


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When they faced each other at the divorce attorney's office for the first time after their separation, there was complete quietness, as if the air was still, and all nature sounds were mute. No one spoke a word, each one of them chose a seat not facing the other directly, then their attorneys took their seats beside them.4

The air was heavy; because the feelings were huge; disappointment, shame, disbelief, anger, regrets, disrespect and hurt. Looking at their faces you could read the thoughts going on their mind; how did all this happen? How did we end up here? Why? You could see that they did not feel or hear anything that was going on in this meeting room, the attorneys' discussions and disputes sometimes raising their voices at each others defending their clients' best interest, all of that to them did not exist. They were sailing on their ship in a sea of thoughts. Their life flashed back like a quick replay, fights, arguments, harsh words, tender love, making love, laughing, going to the movies, visiting family, but the question remained the same; how did we end up here? And the question remained unanswered. 5

They looked in each others' eyes with reluctance at first then their eyes met and the answer was there, tears just came down from their eyes like a river and the sadness of their hearts covered the room with a dark grey veil and suffocated the air.6

She couldn't take it; she collected herself with strength and left quietly without a word and without looking back. She shut the door behind her with the attorneys watching speechless not understanding what was going on. A minute later; he too got up and went out of the room without looking back; leaving behind heavy air and the dark grey veil of sadness hanging there.7


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  • SympatheticMisery
    February 23, 2008
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    I love how in the last paragraph, you repeat the last few lines in the paragraph 7. It strengthens the ending and creates a higher tension in the room.

    But in the 7th paragraph, the word 'as' Should be takin out in the second sentence

    Other than that, I really like this^^


    • Zommorroda
      February 24, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment and your suggestion, I took your suggestion and removed 'as' and I think it sounds much better. I appreciate it. Good luck to you.