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Fagan checked his mentor's pulse. His fingers felt a faint beat barely noticable, but still beating. He could hear the Worgons nearby, loudly crashing through the forest. 1

He looked to Maya, tending the wounded man."Worgans approach. Watch over him while I deal with them. They must pay for their crimes."2

With determination, Fagan turned toward the Worgans who had just entered into the clearing of trees. Cold hatred ran through his body, sending blue sparks from his fingertips. With the slightest raise of his hands, a circle of blue flame encircled Fagan and his companions and consumed any Worgans unfortunate enough to be in it's path. Fagan drew out his sword as he stepped through the blue flame. The Worgans who saw him attacked immediately, screaming a blood thirsty war cry. Though their twisted and deformed bodies were twice the height and width of even the largest of men, they were no match for Fagan's stealth and skill. Their clumsiness slowed them and, one by one, Fagan slashed through each with his sword. Soon, he made his way back to the dying circle of blue flame, stepping through a dozen Worgan carcasses who had felt the cold fury of his wrath. He returned to find Maya smiling and his mentor conscious.3

Maya looked up to him and said,"I did something. I think I might have healed him some."4

His mentor sat up, and winced,"You have, Maya. It is not completely healed, that will take time, but you have done a very fine job." Grinning at Fagan, he said," It seems we have found a healer, boy."

Author notes

don't like the ending. i don't think that at this point, she'll know how to use her water skills to heal- she's untested...and i'd rather give them a reason to hurry to their destination, considering this mentor (no name as of yet) is slowing dying. Fagan doesn't have the skill of water to heal his mentor- his skills are fire and earth crafting. like it???

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