Paranormal Investegators 5

Tala was aimlessly walking around town, she had her walkman up extremely high so she could block out the noise around her. Nobody else could see but she had a trail of followers all shouting for her attention. And all she wanted was some piece and quiet. 1

She decided to head to her favourite coffee shop on Nicollet Avenue, it did the best hot chocolate it was just the right temperature with lovely little marshmallows and a fat dollop of whipped cream on top. She smiled at the thought and picked up her pace. 2

One of her persistent followers jumped in front of her and passed straight through her causing a shiver along her spine and making her come to a stop in the middle of the pavement. She hated when they did that. It felt horrible and cold. 3

She gave the ghost a very piercing stare that sent it away looking very guilty. She rolled her green eyes and carried on walking.4

As she reached the coffee shop she stopped to look at her reflection in an empty window, she tried to smooth down her curly red hair, but it refused to stay put and sprung back to life. 5

She was beginning to hate living in America, and she was very close to giving it all up and heading back to London. But she knew the reaction she would get from her mother and that was the only thing that kept her here, jobless and bored and constantly haunted. 6

She walked into the shop and waved at the girl behind the counter. She’d been here so often now they knew her order of by heart. She took a seat next to the window and waited for the waitress to bring her drink over. She loved to watch people. How they interact with one another.7

And with the dead without even realising that they are. She was currently watching a couple of ghosts who kept passing back and forth through this very strange looking man. He kept shivering and pulling his coat on tighter. She laughed. Ghosts had a funny sense of humour. 8

As she watched her hot chocolate was brought to her she turned to thank the waitress and a sign caught her eye.9

It was hanging on a window just across the street from the coffee shop,10

PARANORMAL INVESTIGATORS INC, HELP WANTED. 11

Getting up she crossed to the till and quickly paid for her hot chocolate, as she put her change back in her purse a man entered the shop. She smiled at him and walked out.12

Heading across the street she first pulled on the door handle but found it locked. So she knocked as hard as possible on the door. She took of her head phones and listened for an answer but nothing came.13

“There is nobody in there” 14

Tala jumped and gasped. She turned to find one of the ghosts that had been following her. It was a woman in her forties with brown hair.15

“O” she said in reply.16

“I saw another man trying to get in just a couple of minutes ago, when you where at the till. He went to the coffee shop” 17

Tala looked at the ghost, they weren’t usually very helpful. 18

“Thank you” she said and headed back over to the coffee shop. Maybe she could wait with this other guy. 19

Continued Part 620

Author notes

I am drafting and working on this as well as Fizbop and Prodigious.Mirth. both have been granted all rights to use the character's and title of this story as well as any details invovled in this story. We are collaborating on this story. I bestow all reserved rights to them as well as I. However, Fizbop maintains main ownership.

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  • onaya3
    November 7, 2008

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    Yay! Another fantastic new angle!

    Great idea to add a psychic into the mix. So far with the elements of science, murder mystery, international characters, auras, orbs and now psychic's; it makes the reader think that there's nothing that this motley crew won't be able to handle!

    Also good plot device of the dead woman in her forties helping our protagonist out. The reader also thinks like the character, why is she helping? It's a great lead up to something else.


  • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
    March 6, 2008

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    Very entertaining.

    p2 'Avenue, it had the best hot chocolate that was just', p7 'watch people; how they interact with one another, and with the dead without even realising that they are there.(I think that you should combine paragraph 7 & 8)', p9 'As she watched, her hot', 'brought to her. She turned',(I think you should combine paragraphs 9 & 10), p12 'her purse, a man entered', p13 'She took off her headphones and listened for an answer, but nothing came.', p16 '"Oh," she said'

    I'm am really beginning to enjoy this story. Tala is a humorous person, whether you intended her to be or not. I'll be interested to see how this works out.

    Andy


  • SeleneStone gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    I love this new character of yours And I love her name too, it's so pretty! So cool how she ends up over at the same place.

    And those ghosts! Oh my god I was laughing at them jumping through the man's body lol. I can't wait to see more of your character in this!
    Joann


  • Fizbop Greeters member
    February 13, 2008

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    Very fantastic add. Thanks for joinging us. i'm so excited i hope you guys are too. THis is a very unique expirence.


  • Disposable gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    Oh I loved this part and how it ties in with the coffe shop and serbian and omg ghost, I think I am now well aware of the interesting factor of who the ghost was

    Brillaint....its all so exciting

    I love your character tala

    P.M
    Blair
    G.H.C ... owner

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