He put his arm around my waist and put the camera in front of our faces. I refused to smile.1
He ran his hands against my ribs. I started to laugh. He then took the picture. He moved his hands and examined the photograph as it appeared on screen.2
I removed the camera from his hands and pushed him against the couch. He sighed as I nibbled on his neck. He threw his head back and i took advantage of the newly revealed skin. All the while running my finger nails over the smooth skin on the small of his back.3
I stop for a minute. I utter those words...I kind of regret it now...4
"I love you." I whisper in his ear.5
Silence from his end. I fell apart.
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Oh, my dear. I am so sorry. It sucks >.<
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'Tisn't sucky.
You built up a kind of tension that was shattered at the end, which matched the message perfectly.
Well, I liked it, anyway.
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I thought it was great, despite the repetitive 'he' usage. Vivid!!!
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I'm sorry. I couldnt think of anything else to call him.
I love you?
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This is awesome. <3 Really. It's cute that it's so simple. Great job.
Maybe if you want to continue it later, you could go ooooon... ;3333
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Love it!
This was great. Simple, you know, but it got the point across. When I started reading it I was smiling and expecting a happy ending, but the twist was meaningful and powerful. Great job. :]
-jj
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