Insomnia. Well not being able to sleep can muck around with the way you think. Perceptions distorted. Thoughts rearranged. Things that you normally would overlook become important especially when you can’t stop looking at them. 1
The light falling upon the room in painted streaks of gold and silver creating a dim glow could only be seen after my eyes had adjusted to the dark. I wish they hadn’t. The figure sat on the bed across from me, where my wardrobe used to be. The room became twice as big at night in the dark. Yet I could never tread in that half of the extended room. It was a perfect reflection of the original half. Whilst during the day the reflecting half of the room was a mirror, at night it was it’s own world. A world without reason. Blank, emotionless and destructive. 2
The same light fell through the window in that destructive half. The bed looked exactly the same. The chair, lamp, clock and drawers in the same place just reversed. This meant that the dark figure on the bed was I. A reflection of the person I was in a world that only existed in my mind. In the world everybody knows it would just be a pair of sliding door-sized mirrors. This however was not the case for me. 3
I moved closer to the edge of the bed and the black figure moved in unison. When I reached the edge of my bed I placed my feet firmly on the floor, and the dark figure did the same. Copying my movements as I did everything, every step, every finger movement. It was as if I could control that world that existed in the night.4
I stand up from my bed and the soft carpet finds it’s way between my toes. The dark figure copying my every move. I am sure that I am just worrying about nothing. There is no way that there could possibly be another extension to my room through my closet window. Everything that I do the dark figure does and everything in that room is the same. The dark can play tricks on your mind. It is just a reflection. Nothing more.5
Smiling at the dark figure I feared not too long ago I realise that I was being idiotic. Lifting my right arm I waved at the figure. However the figure isn’t returning the wave. The figure just stands there looking at me. Finding my way back to my bed I continue to look at its blank faceless head. The figure still just stares at me as if it can’t take its eyes away. Still moving back towards my bed my heels hit the bed and I fall backwards onto the bed never taking my eyes off the figure. I continue to move slowly back towards the wall at the top of my bed. I pull my knees up to my chest and I continue to stare at the dark figure that still hasn’t moved. I wipe my face and feel sweat start to form on my hands.6
As I sit here looking at the figure I can feel and hear my hearts pace increasing. I don’t know what I should do. Should I try and run out of the room or should I scream and get my parents to come and get me? I don’t know what to do. The figure starts to move. Slowly walking towards the door in its half of the room hand outstretched and places his hand on the handle. He rattles the handle and I look to my door and see that the handle is rattling. My eyes begin to open wider as I see the lock turn on and then I quickly turn my head to see the dark figure rip the handle off the door. As the door handle was removed in the dark side of my room the door handle flew off the door in my side. Without the handle I will not be able to get out. Thousands of thoughts are going through my head. Should I run? Should I scream? Should I turn the light on? Turn the light on! I try scrambling for the lamp but I miss and fall off the bed. I look back at the figure just in time to see him pull out a butchers knife from under the mattress. Where did he get a knife? I start to pant as I try finding the switch on the cord but can’t seem to find it. My heart starts to race faster and faster. I keep searching for the switch in the dark and then suddenly a sharp pain flies up my left arm.
I go to scream but no sound is released from my lips. I look at my left arm and I see a small cut starting at the top of my wrist and making its way up towards my elbow. I look to the dark figure and he is cutting the top of his forearm with the knife as he stands in the middle of the room looking at me.7
I try to scream again but I can’t. There is no sound. I scream again and again but there is no sound. The cut stops just before my elbow and blood starts to seep out of the wound created by the dark figure. I look at him again as he stares back at me menacingly again even without a face. I once again quickly start looking for the switch. The dark figure begins to move the knife again slowly as I finally find the switch and then I scream again as my fingers from my left hand fall to the floor just before the switch was hit. All I have on my left hand is my thumb. The sharp stinging pain is shooting from the stumps where my fingers used to be. I look at the fingers on the floor and try to scream again in agony. However I still can’t scream and this dark figure has locked me in my own room and is torturing me by torturing himself. I let go of the bloody stumps and try for the switch again with my right hand this time. As I go my fingers bend backwards and break. I again try to scream. The pain is so excruciating. I bring both of my hands to my chest and bring my knees up still bleeding and in pain from the broken fingers and I look at the dark figure again. He is bent over in a position allowing his right hand to be under his foot where he bent his hand to break the fingers. He stands up with dark drops of blood falling from the left hand and bent backwards fingers. 8
As I sit there in pain I look back at the figure in the mirror as it bends over and awkwardly picks up the butchers knife off the floor. I continue to gasp in agony as I try to say “Why, why are you doing this to me” to the dark figure. Seeing the dark figure stand up fully I look at him with tears coming out of my eyes due to the agony and hear him say,
“Because I want to.”
I try to scream again as I see him lift the knife to his throat and slowly but deeply cut his throat. The tear appears in my flesh as he does it and I start to bleed from the deep wound and as the knife slowly tears through my oesophagus I start to gasp and wheeze and I can’t breath properly as I look at the dark figure before I fall to floor.9
As the sun rises into the sky the room fills with light and shines into the open eyes of the boy who lies dead on the floor. Blood has soaked into the carpet and his fingers are missing from his left hand and broken twisted fingers on his right. His throat has been slit and there is the butcher’s knife that created it in his right hand. The time on the clock read 10:42 am as his mother walked into the room and saw his cold, blue tinged body lying on the floor in a poor of his own blood. His face distorted in sheer terror. She looks at him once and screams as she rushes towards him. Shaking the body she continues to scream and cry as her cries die out and she continues but no sound comes out. She tries to cough but she can’t, and she turns to look at the door as it slams shut. She runs to the door and tries to open it but the handle isn’t there anymore. She turns around and looks at the mirror with her sons blood all over her white blouse and sees herself standing in the middle of the room over his body holding the knife and staring maniacally at her. She continues to scream as the evil figure of herself starts to laugh in the reflection with no sounds coming from either of them.
Author notes
This is the first short story that I have written in a long time. I decided to write this as I should try to write more stories. Thankyou for reading and I hope that you enjoyed it.
A contest entry
- Tales from the Darkside by xBitterxSweetx.
175 points, ended March 7, 2008, 40 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Calling All Creeps by Tiger-Lily.
205 points, ended April 25, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Quick Quickies: Horror by tallblondie.
210 points, ended July 9, 2008, 18 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
My first story in a long time, Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow, very good work! Especially if you haven't written in a while. Very enjoyable, and original, XD
I'm pretty sure I felt a small chill...
Thanks for entering.
Tiger-Lily
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very well done awsome job.


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I love this! You scared the shit out of me when I read this. I'm probably going to get nightmares. This was so real even thought it's perfectly unreal. The emotions are 99.9 % which is an awesome job! You had me on the edge of my seat and my nose almost on the computer screen all the time during this!
Really good job! You are WAY better than me!
I really hope you will write more like this.
/Sara

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it was good... scary too
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Wow, very nice. This is exactly what I was looking for when I created my contest. This was wonderfully gruesome; I absolutely adored it. Well done! One thing though, as I was reading, I noticed that your phrases are a bit too long on most occassions. I had to stop a couple of times and re-read parts of it so I could fully understand the message you were trying to convey. Don't be afraid to break up your sentences by using [.] [,] [;} or [-]. Other than that, your imagery was lovely and I had fun reading it. Thanks for entering my contest and Great Job!
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I loved this.
This was a really great piece. Your descriptoin was brillant. I could feel the fear and the pain; it leaped off the page. I barely even noticed any mistakes! Great job. :]
-jj

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thanks alot
i tried to make it seem realistic because in a way i experienced this when i was up on holidays at noosa, it was very freaky because i was looking at myself in the mirror at night and then i thought about it and it creeped me out, so i decided to use it
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When I reached the edge of my bed I placed my feet firmly on the flor, and the dark figure did the same. Copying my movements as I did everything, every step, every finger movement. parargraph 4 = floor

Whoa this really makes for one horror story...I love the way you made him feel the dark figure untimatly his refelctions pain...
The terror and torture he encounted ..mmm made my heart wrench and made me cringe..
example: I look to the dark figure and he is cutting the top of his forearm with the knife as he stands in the middle of the room looking at me.
all through it you had me in suspense and spine tingly feelings...
And I thought it was well executed, right till the end..,
The thing you did that made it suberb and not just well done or good was the ending eith the mother being locked in the room with the reflection of herself...
Was well written, finer mistakes but who ...
cares
you produced a powerfull and provoking story that will leave reader with there own little guessing game....
Loved it, and loved the character might I add...
Misery loved death
blair

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thankyou alot for your comment, i fixed the flor mistake in paragraph 4 lol, we all make our own little typos every once and a while
yeah whilst i tried to make it seem like he was being killed by another thing it sorta gives off the vibe of him killing himself because the reflection in the mirror technically was him, its a bit weird but oh well lol
thanks
all the best
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incredibly chilling. really really really interesting! i thoroughly enjoyed the whole plot and how you wrote it... it must have been hard to describe each person without confusing them and screwing it up. this was so good!
Well done (Y)
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well really there were only 2 characters, the mother and the boy, but i had to distinguish the dark figure and the boy as two seperate entities.
thankyou for reading
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thats what i meant by each person... XD lol
<3
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