Fallen Chapter 1 part 1

Groggily I wandered out the door into the sunlight, reaching up a hand to protect my gaze from the brightness. I yawned a bit as I waited for my eyes to adjust, looking about slowly. "I dont want to go to school today.." I grumbled slowly as I began to walk away from the small house. The sun had just risen over the small mountains, and just happened to be in my way as I walked. I sighed a bit, the small town virtually lifeless at this time of the morning. I strolled boredly between the houses, heading to school at a slow pace. The morning wasn't quite cold but not hot either, just somewhere in between. The clouds floated above my head, it had rained last night again. It bothered me because there was a leak in the roof.1

My eyes scan the ground as I walk slowly along a small drit path behind small buildings that were on either side of him. Small puddels littered the ground, my eyes shooting away from them in an attempt to avoid the reflected sunlight. It didn't work very well for as I walked I was nearly blinded and ended up tripping into one of the walls of the buildings on my path. I barely managed to catch myself. I stared down at my feet, letting my pounding heart calm down from that sudden fall. In front of my feet was a small puddle, showing me my reflection. I stared at it for a moment, examining my features. Long flat black hair that reached down to about an inch above my shoulders, a thin face with strong features, peircing icy blue eyes staring back at me. 2

Pushing off the wall of the building I begin the tredge to school once more. Even though the town was small it still had a few people in it for a few classes. I sighed as I stood before the small school house. It wasn't time for school for another hour or so at least. I came early everyday for some reason or another, this time it had been to hang out with my friends. With a sigh I sat back on the steps, leaning forward in a slouched position, eyes searching for my friends.

Sorry it took so long, im just not into the writing right now. I dont know about the first person thing so if you dont like it tell me so i can change it because i dont know which im better at.

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  • The Boy
    June 18
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    I liked it

    but I wrote it so im a cheater haha


  • CrystalFlower
    February 11, 2008

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    Awesome!

    I love it! Write more dang it! Your doing really good with the first person thing, and I think it works good with the story so far.