Sparks: Reloaded [One]

Sometimes a past is not meant to be forgotten. Sometimes when you try to run away, the past runs up to catch hold of you again - and at the times when you most don't want to, you have to face it all over again.1

And sometimes, Destiny herself rises to challenge you all over again.2

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//Three years had passed since the Earth Alliance had won their war against those who had opposed the coming of the Sparklings - the people who inhabited the planet of Sparks. The Sparklings now shared their world somewhat peacefully with the Earthlings, and schools have even opened their doors to the Sparklings in need of a normal education.//4

Mouse Oak stopped typing, proceeding back to read what she had typed out so far - not much, but more than enough. The seventeen-year-old grinned as she saved the file, switching off the computer and stood up to stretch. "Are you still using this computer?" someone suddenly asked. Whirling around, she met the green eyes of a boy, taller and probably much older than her. He flinched. She waited for a moment as his eyes travel down to her wrist, where a bracelet hung - and waited till his face paled. "I mean, I can wait... I'm no-not in a hurry."5

Mouse resisted the urge to smirk and scare him even more - a nice hobby. "You know, I thought there was supposed to be no discrimination amongst us," she reprimanded lightly, and tapped her bracelet. "This doesn't set me any further from you, does it? I mean, besides the fact my eyes are red?" It wasn't like she hated her eyes, but she did often use them to her advantage, to scare the bullies away.6

The boy was starting to stutter and she knew he was truly afraid of what she was - Sparkling. But Sparklings were humans, she wanted to say, and we know it from our legends. We came from Earth. We were once you.7

"Don't worry, I've finished," she said, tapping her diskette on her nose and then skipping away.8

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//Still, the schools did worry, and so they implemented a rule. All Sparklings had to wear bracelets upon which the gems on the bracelet will tell all what elements they wield, and the symbol of their Clan, if any. If one's Clan died in the War, then the symbol of the Goddess, a equal cross within a perfect circle shall replace where the Clan's symbol is.//10

Alec looked through it all, and then he erased everything. The person behind him scowled loudly, but he ignored said person. Said person tried snorting and everything, but all Alec Birch did was to face the computer screen. "ALEC!"11

Immediately, everyone in the library yelled, "Sssssh!"12

Alec sighed. "What is it?"13

"It was okay! You didn't have to erase it and start all over again! This way we'll never be done!" While talking, the person behind him placed a hand on the mouse and clicked the Undo button, making all his hard work come back again. The hand was pulled back, but not before Alec saw the symbol of the Goddess hanging from the bracelet. He smiled grimly, and reached out to start typing again.14

On his hand, he wore a bracelet. He, too, was wearing the symbol of the Goddess.15

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"The Sparklings had many legends. One of the most famous and recent would be the Chosen One - supposed seventh son of seventh son from the most ancient days. He was said to have a lot of power and then one day, he would choose either Darkness or Light. What happens if he chose one side, Michelle?"17

Michelle Elm hadn't raised her hand, and she wondered why she was doing here, in Culture of Sparks. She knew almost everything - after all, wasn't that a bracelet around her wrist? Oh, the Chosen One. She knew everything about him. She should. "That side would rule for as long as the Chosen One remains alive," she answered plainly. Plain, and leaving out the harsh reality.18

The Chosen One was always killed by his seventh son, and then the whole process starts again, seven generations after the Chosen. And her generation... Her generation was the seventh.19

"Very good, Michelle," the teacher commented. "I'm sure you know all the answers so you'll stay out of the quiz we're playing later.. Is that fine with you?"20

She rolled her eyes. "Just because my name is Elm doesn't mean I know everything, you know," she muttered bitterly, but nodded anyway and started wondering once again what on earth was she doing here.21

"Thank you," the teacher sounded very relieved. "Nigel-"22

For the rest of the lesson, she doodled and wondered how her friends were in their own schools.23

---24

Violet Phoenix sat on her throne, drumming her fingers. "Where is the Crown Prince? Where is my son"? she asked a passing servant, who shook her head. She spent some time grumbling even more, before she thought of another question. "Where is the Crown Prince's twin brother? I want him here!"25

She noticed how the servants glanced nervously towards each other and she demanded to know the truth. 26

"My Lady, the Crown Princes have left Sparks and gone to Earth," one of the servants answered fearfully. 27

Her answer was a mighty shout of curses that rang and rang and rang - until the servants all retreated back to their rooms. 28

"Why?" she demanded of the silence. "Why have they returned to Earth? The Chosen brat is still here... He should be, and the Winca Prince is here - so my son has no reason to go back down there..."29

She laughed suddenly. "Why didn't you tell me, my dear friend? Destiny?" Wiping a tear from her eye, she stood up and opened her arms wide to welcomed the lady that stood in front of her. "It's so nice of you to pay me a visit, Mooncross."30

---31

'The school does not allow Daemons.' The sentence was spoken in the Auld Language, and known only to people who had Daemons. Not much, seeing how many had died in the Alliance War, Gareth thought sadly, as he walked alongside the black panther - his Daemon.32

"Loophole - not in classes. You can stay in the room or something," he answered almost instantly. 33

'Loopholes, huh?' His Daemon asked. 'That's interesting. You looked for loopholes. You never do. What if your room-mate doesn't like me?'34

"You don't have to be visible, and you can hide somewhere. I'll visit you daily if you do," he replied. He had already thought of this beforehand.35

'You really want me to be with you, don't you?'36

Yes, that was the reason why he had tried to find a school with this loophole, and the reason why he had thought everything beforehand. This was a new school, full of new faces he didn't know and he wanted somebody he knew to talk to, to chat about the old days...37

The old days before the war came, before so many died, before when the land was happy, and people had worshipped the Goddess in peace.38

'I don't like this school.'39

"It's the only one with a loophole," he explained.40

'There's a strange aura around it.'41

Gareth had no reply to that, so all he did was to stand outside the gate, waiting. 42

'The bracelet thing, you don't mind?'43

He closed his eyes, trying to calm his nerves. 44

'Don't worry. I'll be beside you all the way through.'45

"I know, Shadow," he whispered and then he opened the gate, stepping into the school.46

Author notes

This is the brief introduction of the story. The people introduced all mostly in different schools, facing the same problem of the braclet discrimination. Anything you don't understand? Ask and it will be explained.

This might just be the breakthrough I needed to write Sparks to the end. =)

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  • December 3, 2004
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    at first i didn't quite get this; everything(setting and characters) kept jumping around...
    when you explained everything in your last comment i got it then...
    and you do need to explain the loophole thing better, b/c like SleepyEyedreams said; it sounded as if Loophole was the Daemon's name.

    but anywho! I would love to read more of this! awesome story so far!

  • SleepyEyedreams
    November 29, 2004
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    yes I think so...anyway can't wait until the next chapter


  • Lilied
    November 29, 2004
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    I don't know how to tell you this - but I really really would love to thank you for this comment, because it helped me to gather my thoughts and I can answer some of the questions posed.

    That part was supposed to be rather odd - as if the woman she was talking to in the end had suddenly appeared in thin air. [You must forgive me for the fact that I love cliffhangers and sort of like to use them quite a lot.

    Okay, I'll remember to talk about about the loophole when rewriting this chapter. The reference to "Elm" is one of the really background things which will be explained later on.

    The two of them, Mouse and Alec are not writing stories. They are all in school on Earth, and have to write an essay explaining Sparks for a piece of their homework, which at the smae time tells the reader on what the setting is like.

    Daemons - usually every Sparkling has one, but not many decide to stay with their Daemons pass the age of 12, and the Daemons can go free, to find someone else to "guard". *laughs* I guess I should explain this in the story as well, shouldn't I?

    Mouse, Alec, Kiran and Michelle are sadly, not the main focus of the story, though they will be briefly mentioned many times within the whole long story itself because of their connection and history with the Chosen One.

    In other words, this chapter just sets the background for the entire story to move on. That's okay, right?

  • SleepyEyedreams
    November 26, 2004
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    "- and at the times when you most don't want to, you have to face it all over again." I think mostly instead of most would fit better here.

    "Why?" she demanded of the silence. "Why have they returned to Earth? The Chosen brat is still here... He should be, and the Winca Prince is here - so my son has no reason to go back down there..."

    She laughed suddenly. "Why didn't you tell me, my dear friend? Destiny?" Wiping a tear from her eye, she stood up and opened her arms wide to welcomed the lady that stood in front of her. "It's so nice of you to pay me a visit, Mooncross." You need to have a transition or something between these two because there not making sense right now.

    Loopholes?

    "I'm sure you know all the answers so you'll stay out of the quiz we're playing later.. Is that fine with you?" Their playing a quiz later?



    supposed seventh son of seventh son from the most ancient days. <--you may want to put some the's in this to make it less confusing.

    "Michelle Elm hadn't raised her hand, and she wondered why she was doing here, in Culture of Sparks." I think you mean what not why.

    "...and the reason why he had thought everything beforehand." thought OF everything before.

    Okay explain the loophole better or something because I felt that that was the Daemon's name. Also why does only this one sparkling have a Daemon? Is it a clan thing? What is the reference of the Elm about, do people think people with the last name Elm know everything? Another thing is why are two different Sparklings writing a story? Instead of having all of them be alone at different schools why not have two of them together at one school. That way you can show the difference it makes when you have a Sparkling friend. shrug just a suggestion. Otherwise I think you just need to expand upon each story for the first chapter. I am intersted in learning more about the story, but I don't really feel a conection with any of the characters. Your story reminds me of Terry Brooks and the way he sets up his story The Talismans of Shannara. He had many different characters and he would devote an entire chapter to one character. I think you may want to try doing that instead of what your doing now.

    If you have any further questions or need me to explain something better (I know I can be confusing at times) just IM me or something. Can't wait for the next part!


  • Lilied
    November 22, 2004
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    The characters used in the first few parts aren't really the main part of the story, and are used only for giving a brief introduction to the story. Character development will of course be a must, and probably in the next chapter.

    Oh yes, I'll go look at your stories now - I've been missing a lot, haven't I? =)


  • Araina
    November 22, 2004
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    This is a very interesting start, and I hope you write more to it. I'd like to see a bit more in depth character development, and maybe longer sections about each person, but it's still really good. You have a very original, very creative idea that should be elaborated on. Great writing!

  • vortexofdoom
    November 21, 2004
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    This was really interesting. Great story. Can't wait to read more!!

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