My day at school by Tristy

Having absolutely no athletic talent, an okay brain, and plain looks either makes me stand out or be unseen. I only look forward to passing my classes and the vending machines-snacks are cute to look at and taste goooood! 1

We take off in the bus, brown backpack from roxy on my shoulder and the usual outfit of jeans and a t-shirt, I have to find an empty seat fast. Then after 30 long minutes we head to Slipper High.  Don't ask me on the name, the vice-principal is known to be sensitive on that.2

I head to math class, do a test, take notes, completely taken to the sunny air and how it reminds me of eating cookies at kindergarten class. So I think, if I can find three (magic number, huh) things I am happy about in high school, I will join a club. The moment happens again and now it's two more things. Oh joy.3

It is recess. I hurry and find the library and I drop my things. "Aiya!" I blush at my embarrassing sound and hurry to get my books I had to return. A girl helped me out and asked if I'm okay. I nod in affirmation and hurry to the library saying a quick thank you. I'm extremely shy and don't know what to talk about, well maybe this but I would sound weird. Thing two: kind people.4

I hurry and return my books and smile at everything. I pick a book, the bell rings, and I sigh and head to English. Nothing important enough happened until after school.5

I was heading out and then a classmate found me and gave me something-it was my i.d. I thought I had it. I say thank you. She told me I left it in the girl's restroom and comments on my fast walking. I smile, blushing, and say sorry. She says no sweat and hurries to her car. I hurry to the bus, but stayed behind and called my mom, I guess I'm heading to judo try-outs, then library, then art. I keep my promises. Thing two: determination.

Author notes

Tristy isn't a real person. Not me.

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  • VainfulSideEffects
    May 22, 2008
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    really good good pace the contest off scholl all fast


  • xxmomoxxx
    March 17, 2008
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    wow omg slow down its so fast-moving i can hardly keep up. :/


  • kelseyo
    February 11, 2008
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    To me, the whole thing just seemed very rushed. Instead of using transitions, you just seemed like you wanted to get the story over with before you forgot what you were trying to say. Maybe just slow it down, add more detail, and work on your transitioning. Good job.
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    Kelsey