In The Midst

There, in the midst, stands a figure1

black, yet visible, drenched in pain and hopelesness2

Do I know this figure or not?3

as it moves closer and closer, drowning me in fear4

I feel the blade of a knife brush my cheek softly5

as the figure becomes a murderer6

Before I even know it, I am dead, hoping7

Hoping that this figure will leave me in my peace8

In the midst of heaven9

A contest entry

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  • Xtclozer-
    March 1, 2008

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    Short, but it was good. Despite it being a little TOO short, it was good. Unfortinately.. this doesnt go to my rules. It is under the minimum of words, and, despite how annoying this will be, I am afraid I might have to just not let you win, or even DQ you. Did you read the rules? I except no poems under 100 words.
    I am extremely sorry The poem was great though, very descriptive.

    Thanks for entering any way, unfortinately, it is too short.
    If you didn't, next time read the rules. If you did, try to follow them.


  • TheBlueRoad
    February 19, 2008

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    I like the description of this person who is the murderer, "Black, yet visible, drenched in pain and hopelesness." It said something more than the whole poem, saying the secret incomprehensible reason why he kills.

    The title is a great idea.


  • SparklingMoonlight
    February 14, 2008

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    Sorry

    I'm sorry, but in the rules I said no poems, try entering another contest or enter a story please. I will have to remove this. Thanks

    ~Lil~


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    February 14, 2008

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    Well, its a very good poem, tells a clear story. For my contest though its nothing outstanding, a poem is harder to score descriptive points in then a story since it is ment to be descriptive. I however love the poem, and greatly enjoyed reading it.