we can't see the stars
yet they exist1
In the nightime
we can't see the sun
yet it exists2
When we're apart
you can't see my love
yet it is there....
ALWAYS.3
I leaned into the stone pillar that would take me to platform 9 ¾. The padded shoulder strap of my guitar case cut into my back and shoulder, and I winced as a slight sting ran through my back. I fell through the pillar with a slight gasp of surprise. Catching myself before I hit the floor a mass of blond hair came down covering my eye. My foot caught in my long hippie like skirt, and BAM!!! I hit the floor with a loud THUMP. Everything hit the cement floor and went flying. Sitting on the ground muttering a stream of curses, I gathered up my hair into a messy bun. A loud laugh filled the air. I looked to see who was laughing at me. A sliver haired boy was pointing and laughing at me with his friends. I stared him down and growled. I was thinking about turning into a wolf but then out of the corner of my eye I saw Mickey and Alex walk in.
“MICKEY!! ALEX!! Over here.” I cried excitedly. Mickey was with her "friend" Caleb...and, woah, they were walking hand and hand, though I don't think that they noticed, and Alex’s boyfriend Rick walked over and said hi. Mickey’s hair was light brown and wavy, a contrast to Caleb’s dark black curls. Alex’s hair was black with red highlights, in her usual bun, and Rick's was blond. We all squealed and hugged except for Rick and Caleb who just looked at each other and sighed. They looked lean. They had just come from an exclusive ballet camp.
“Have you guys seen Jacob? He was supposed to meet me here, like, 20 minutes ago.” I asked.
“I’ve been here the whole time. By the way, have I told you how great you look today?”
I turned and saw his copper hair, his famous pony tail and dark loving eyes. A scar went across his face from the left temple to the bottom right of his face. I liked it. He was my werewolf. He leaned down and kissed me. Yes, kissed me in the middle of a busy train station. I looked over and saw that Rick was trying to give Alex something when she pushed it away. He was always buying her gifts. I found myself giggling again. Then Kathryn and Molly walked in.
“OMG!!! Guys, guys over here, over here.” I yelled. Then bam all of us started hugging and squealing again. We were all so happy to be together. I had finally put my stuff in one compartment when Jacob came and told me to pick up everything and move into a different compartment. That frustrated me a bit, but I got over it. Kathryn’s long black wavy hair was pulled back in a braid and with her head on her boyfriend Wyatt’s shoulder. Molly and her mass of curls sat looking out the window with a longing look.
“Molly, the train will be leaving in a few minutes. Save the puppy dog eyes for another day.” I told her. She looked at me and smiled.
“Look guys, I’m so tired. I’m going to nap. The closing show was last night and I was up late.” I let out a huge yawn. Jacob told us that since were representing the School for Young and talented Wizards and Witches, New York we would not be sorted until next year. Though we get to pick which ever house we want to sleep in. We will also be taking classes with the other 4th years. Closing my eyes I laid my head down onto Jacob shoulders. An hour passed and then I jolted up right.
“OMG!! Bells and Patches, oh I forgot them in the other compartment.” I exclaimed.
Kathryn shrieked because she had also left her puppy Simon in the same compartment that I had left my snowy owl Bells and my calico cat Patches in. Getting up we both darted out of the compartment and down the hall. We looked in each compartment as we passed searching for our missing pets. Nearing the end of the train we gave one last glance in the only compartment at this end of the train. Inside was a young black haired boy, a brown haired girl and a red haired boy.
“Who the heck are you???” I asked.
“Oh my god, you don’t know who the famous Harry Potter is?” He looked amazed.
“Ummmm, no. All we know is Hollister, and Delias are awesome…..And, by the way, in America, it’s OMG, not ‘Oh my god’.” Kathryn said assertively.
“YOU two are sooooo weird….” The brown haired girl complained.
“Excuse us…..” I said.
“Get lost!” The red haired boy shouted at us. “Or I’ll have to show chocolate frogs down your throat.”
“We wouldn’t want that…” I said sarcastically. I rolled my eyes to finish it off with a nice touch. Kathryn and I turned to leave and out of the corner of my eyes I saw my poor little owl sitting upon “Famous” Harry Potter’s shoulder.
“Hey, umm, Mr. Harry Potter sir, WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING WITH MY OWL?!?!?!?” I bellowed.
“YOU’RE OWL??” Harry sneered.
“Well, of course it’s my FU-----!!”
“Cole, watch your language.” Kathryn begged. “What would your mom think?”
“Who cares what my mom would think?” Cole screamed. “We’re in England, on our way to boarding school, mom will never hear of this…..I just want my FU---!!”
“Cole!!!”
“Sorry” I said looking all puffy-eyed at Kathryn.
“Cole, you know I’m a sucker for puffy-eyes….” Kathryn Joked.
“Will you two just get on with it????” Harry whispered.
“We heard that!!” Kathryn and I said together. The tiny sliver bells on Bells ankle jingled........4
To be continued.... 5
Author notes
THIS NOT DONE!!!! I gots to go but enjoy so far.
Alex is Sasha
Mickey is Lise
Kathryn is well Kathryn
Molly is katie and Natalie combined.
ALL COLLABORATERS U ARE NOT ALLOWED TO CHANGE ANYTHING WITHOUT MY PERMISSION IF YOU DO YOU DIE!!!!!! I MEAN THIS!!!! GRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR.
Please tell me what you think
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...What's with the names...
you didn't put me in!! Oh well. *angry look*
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I have a question - on this part (sasha paste)
Rick and Caleb who just looked at each other and sighed. They looked lean. They had just come from an exclusive ballet camp.
Is that talking about Alex and Mickey or Caleb and Rick? I got a little confused. May want to clarify that.
Oh and (you KNOW i'm really picky about this)
“Molly the train will be leaving in a few minutes save the puppy dog eyes for another day.” I told her. She looked at me and smiled.
shouldn't there be a period between MINUTES AND SAVE?? sorry. i must fix it. I really like your descriptions and mass of curls. lol -
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Ok, sasha, those things were partially my fault. I helped leigh write it. I wrote it from the line "Who the heck are you?" Wiat, maybe...no wait...none of those mistakes were of my doing...*haha* *whoops*
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Alright Leigh if me and KT are so similar name ten things about me and KT that aren't physical atributes, if you can than we will give you no more hell about combining us if you can't I GET MY OWN PERSON! AND SHE WILL NOT BE NAMED MOLLY! And I suppose out of love I will make a new fic your in and you can fall siriusly in love, yes pun intended. I'll probably do that anyway though so w.e.
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profanity is the effort of the feeble mind to express itself!!!
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eeeeeeeeee caleb!!! perfect!!!!


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So sasha has black hair with red streaks? Interesting. I like where this is going though. And wait, what is Heart talking about? Is it something about me and natalie? But good story.
*KT*
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Write more soon, please. ^^ I would like to continue reading this.
Mistake:
{Grunt and push a piece of blonde hair out of my eyes, I started to walk to the scarlet engine waiting to take me to Hogwarts)Try: As I began to make my way to the scarlet engine I let out a grunt. A loose piece of my blond hair had fallen over my eyes. I hastily hooked the strand behind my ear and focused back on the train, the one thing that would take me to Hogwarts.
One thing I noticed is that you tend to lack description and details. You should try adding in more emotion into your characters (espicailly the first-person character) for it will give the reader a sense of being next to the character and feeling what they feel.
For example: My heart leapt with joy as I watched the steam billow out of the scarlet train engine. I felt as if the train was waiting just for me. My gaze stared longingly at the windows to the comparments and I imagined myself in them. Oh, how I wanted to run inside the train right then and there. But now was not the time. I needed to find my friends first. My shoulder slightly stung with pain as the strap to my guitar case cut into my shoulder.
I find it alot more fun and interesting when I add in emotions and feelings into the segments of stories I write. It makes the reader love the story even more too.
PLEASE send me a message when you update this with more of the story! I really want to read it, for I love Harry Potter fanfics.








