"Aramina? Aramina West?" I heard from the crowded platform. I turned to see my bedroom fantasy.1
"I'm sorry --" I began, his passionate kiss interrupting me.2
"You were a man, so what?" he whispered, "Take me back. If not, we'll always have Zanzibar."3
"I've never been to Zanzibar..." I said, breathless.
A contest entry
- Under 50, Easy Peasy by OkapiShomapi.
275 points, ended February 28, 2008, 13 entries
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Zanzibar is such a nice name... I like it. Actually, Aramina is a nice name too. Kudos!
I really like this piece. It's emotional, and actually tells a story. Plus, it leaves me wanting more, which is awesome.
Thanks, and good luck!
annye
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Thanks! I have several friends bugging me now to write a longer version of this. Heh. I feel all warm and fuzzy.
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Go Edeyn!!! This story is quite interesting.
Will there be a continuation later?
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Likely. It appears that folks seem to actually like this idea.
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Ok, so your rendition is better than my nip-tuck prodecure version. I like it. Being half gay only makes this more interesting to me. Yes... half gay. That's also known as bi. Hmph.
Seriously though, nice story that speaks volumes though it says little. Good job. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks, Cagey. Remind me sometime and I'll send you the 100 word version, which adds a bit. I'll be expanding it to a full-fledged short story at some point, too.
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