Who are you?

Once upon a time there was a man named Hepector who went to visit the rough mountains on a deserted Island.1

He loved the solitude; he was the only one who could understand himself, he made himself a shelter where he would meditate for hours.2

All was going well, he was really enjoying his stay at the Island, he was in love with himself and the nature, according to his believes he and nature were one.3

One day Hepector landed in a big trouble, he was captured by the natives of Island.4

They put him a dark dungeon and told him that tomorrow morning he would be presented to the Poopa, the Indian’s great leader.5

The Indians were usually gentle people who never killed or hurt anyone, but they were scared of Hepector, who a white man, the first of that kind they had seen in there lives.6

They consider him to be a henchman of the white witch, the Chiti they called her.7

The Poppa asked Hepector “who are you?” he didn’t replied, and they politely asked, then tortured him and even tried witchcraft, but he wouldn’t speak.8

Finally he died due to extreme torture and witchcraft, but he didn’t utter a single word.9

P.S: Hepector was deaf and dumb .10

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This is for the contest 10 sentences, I know it's stupid, but so what. You don't have to be philosophical all the time a good laugh won't hurt

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  • potaytee
    July 1, 2008
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    That's interesting, good writting. Good luck for my contest.


  • Rosemary silver member
    April 17, 2008
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    Interresting

    Thanks for entering my contest and good luck


  • MoonRoseWolf gold member
    March 9, 2008

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    Not bad, I felt so sorry for Hepector at the end! It was a good twist, I really liked it, well done!


  • Shah Z
    March 1, 2008
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    this is my story HitmanShah, option 2 humor


  • Vixen7
    February 28, 2008

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    Nice little story. Compact and to the point with a good twist at the end. Yes I like it, good one. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.


  • ablelaz silver member
    February 9, 2008

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    Not bad considering the restrictions imposed

    With a little better opertunity for character development and sence setting, I think this could be a gem. It was anticlametic, but I think that was due to the length resriction.


  • Xtclozer-
    February 8, 2008

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    Honest opinion? well, I will tell you this. It was great and I'm happy that the random button brought me here

    Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more of your stuff


  • Melli
    February 8, 2008
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    Haha, thats kind of silly! I don't think you'll win anything in my contest, but thanks a bunch for entering! =D It was silly, but didn't make me laugh too much. poor old Hepector! Wow, what a weird name! Good job and good luck -D

    KEEP WRITING!

    -Melli<33


  • Rosen Rot
    February 8, 2008
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    Heh.
    I like it.
    Strange but funny.

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