All these Lives1
Chapter Two2
~Universal curiosity~3
One4
“When will you be leaving David.” Adam asked as I walked through our dorm room door.5
I threw my bag onto my bed and stripped down to my boxers. The sweat still dripping down my body from my gym work out.6
His eyes stayed fixated on my body, traveling from my eyes to my toes. It unnerved me a little, I knew that Adam was a bit strange that way, so interested with people, so interested in bodies in general.7
Some of the guys back in the gym had called him a homo, other had said they reminded him more like a pedophile serial killer, as his hair swept across his face giving him the cryptic, creepy look.8
I personally did not think either. Adam was a smart, kind guy, he had always been there to watch my back and help me when I needed a friend or help with my work. He had been nothing but nice to me, and I hated it when they made judgment on him without even getting to know him.9
“Tomorrow afternoon, Don booked me a flight and I am to land back in Sweden sometime the next morning.”10
Frowning he the book that he was reading, The Catcher and the Rye, a classic, though I had not stayed that long enough in English class to even attempt to read it.11
“You will be coming back next term won't you?” he asked nervously.12
I could sense the sadness in his voice, it broke my heart. I guessed that I was Adams only friend, and it did not make it easier knowing how harsh some of the guys could be. It is not surprising if he did turn out to be a serial killer after the ordeal some of them put him through sometimes, and even though I had tried my hardest to stop them, they would never listen.13
Smiling I nodded, hoping to ease his a troubles a little.14
“Of course I will, I can guarantee you this place is like my second home, or third since Don's houser is my home to,” I laughed, running my hands briskly through my hair.15
Adam smiled, his lips so full, his smile was amazing.16
What was I saying, Of course he was one of the most beautiful men on the campus, It was hard to believe he did not have a girlfriend already, but then again he would not exactly have a chance if every one thought he was gay.17
I stepped over, sitting beside him, my hand placed on his shoulder.18
“Keep your chin up, I promise things will get better for you soon.”19
Overwhelmed my my comment, he blushed, turning a light color, his eyes accentuating his face perfectly.20
“Thanks David, it means a lot to me that somebody actually cares about me.”21
Grinning I lay down next to him, taking the book from beside him.22
“Think I should give this book a chance, you seem to be enjoying it a lot, haven't seen you without it since we got assigned it last week.”23
Amazed at my interest in the book he took the book out of my hands, flicking through the pages, and stared me deep in the eyes, watching me.24
“I think everything deserves a try at least once, otherwise what is the point of life, life is about seeking the different, experimenting with things beyond our ordinary day to day lives.”25
He never fazed to astound me with his profound comments, his ideas, he was an inspiration to a guy like me who did not really have an intelligence in the artistic word of speaking.26
Though somehow I got the distinct feeling that this went deeper than reading a book, I had the feeling he was trying to tell me something, but I was to afraid to ask him, I would just let it be, knowing he meant something different. In time I was sure he would explain in to me.27
“Well you got me, I have no option now,” I chuckled, slowly turning my head to the door.28
Adam placed his hand on my arm, his eyes once again scanning mine for some response, It was as if he was begging me to say something, something he needed to hear but I did not no what to say at all.29
Instead I watched him, loving the touch of his warm hand on my skin, but hating the way it confused me.30
“You are Amazing David, truly amazing, I really like you.”31
I like you... what did that mean... friends... brothers... I knew what it meant, maybe the boys had been right... I was so glad they never figured me out like that.32
Bringing my hand to his face, I ran it over his soft white skin, the warmness shooting throughout my whole body, like an electrical shock, the current so strong it hit the core of my heart and every vein and nerve in my body.33
“I like you to,” I breathed against his skin.34
Stroking my hair, he twirled his fingers around it, moving his face closer to mine.35
“You do?”36
Soothing my own nerves I nodded, wanting to move even closer towards him till our lips touched.37
“I'm not gay Adam.”38
Sliding his hand towards my lips he traced them, slipping them inside me mouth.39
“Neither am I.”40
I sucked on his fingers, letting my tongue caress them, before moving in closer , kissing his forehead right down to the tips of his nose.41
“Can we really do this,” I asked, starting to feel myself getting aroused, the feeling sinking throughout my body, stiffening with his touch.42
“Oh... please... I can't take it anymore,” he cried, grabbing my face with both of his hands, moving his body on top of mine, “Just let me take control and let me show you what fucking is all about.”43
I could not control myself, I had no choice but to submit.44
“Okay...Okay...Fuck me Adam...fuck me.”45
Two46
“Flight 45 to Sweden departure calling.”47
I looked at the clock, it was boarding time, I was ready for this, I was ready to leave this country.48
Adam stood behind me, his arms wrapped around my waist. For some reason I had no problem with his public display of affection. I knew no-one here, and no-one knew me. It was just Adam and I, showing each providing each other with comfort and with love.49
Final call for boarding on flight 45 , Australia to Sweden.” The voice over called.50
I turned around, wrapping my arms tightly around Adam, kissing him passionately while a group of fellow passengers stared in disgust.51
It had all happened so fast last night.52
Making love to him had been the most frightening part, the most painful part, but the most rewarding. I still did not understand my feelings, but I agreed to see where they would take me. Not only for Adam, but for myself.53
Those three words... I love you... Could I bring myself to say them?54
“Now you will call me as soon as you arrive at Don's house wont you?” he asked for the tenth time today.55
Rubbing my eyes, I nodded.56
“I promise to call you as soon as I hit Sweden if it makes you feel any better.”57
He grinned, not wanting to let me go. I was the same, but I knew if I didn't I would miss my flight and Don would not be to happy.58
Letting him go, I kissed him again and walked over to the long line of passengers that awaited to board the plane.59
“I love you David, never forget that,”he shouted, his eyes all swollen with tears, his hands crossed over his chest in an attempt to look strong.60
Feeling hot tears melting down my own cheeks I turned to wave goodbye, the ticket master stamping my approval. I blew Adam a kiss, handing the master my bag.61
“I love you Adam, never forget that.”62
Three63
The air was cool on the plane, it blew down my shirt and it was a nice change from the hot Australian weather I had encountered in the last few months.64
I was not quite sure what to expect of the weather in Sweden. Don had not exactly told me that much. He had just called to tell me my parents wishes for the holidays and for me to be prepared for some work in his shop.65
I had to say I was not to thrilled about the idea of working in a cafe like shop. While I was quite popular upon campus, I found it hard to deal with people without having a panic attack with no understanding there direct intentions.66
I was suddenly very appreciative of Adam, he had made my life easier to understand, even though I had not noticed it until I was to late. Thinking of work, made me think of him, and how dedicated he was to his study, despite the actions of the ass holes who made his life a living hell. He had courage, he was strong.67
I was weak, and I knew that once I set foot on Sweden I would have to learn to be a stronger man.68
“The catcher and the rye”, I read aloud.69
A few people looked my way, looking as if to wonder about my sanity level.70
I smiled and waved, flashing them my book and they nodded, understanding.71
I had remembered my English teachers love for this book, and how it seemed so many people on campus had fallen in love with it as well.72
I opened it up, bringing it to my nose. It smelt like Adam, like fruit mixed with a little bit of aftershave. That warm and inviting smell. I could tell I was going to enjoy this book, even if it was just to open it up to remind me of Adam.73
“We would wish to ask all passengers to fasten there seat belts as we are ready for lift of.”74
I fastened my seatbelt, taking some gum from my jumper pocket and popped it into my mouth. I had come prepared. You could never be to prepared for a situation like this.
Author notes
Chapter two:
Character David...
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Comments
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Needs Polishing
1. Comma after "leaving, David?"
2. The second bit should be "my boxers, the sweat" or "my boxers. The sweat was."
3. "I hated it when they made judgementS on him"
4. You dont' need to state that The Catcher in the Rye is a classic, everyone who reads already knows; it's demeaning to your reader.
5. A couple of places where you neglected apostrophes, just go back and check.
6. OH HO~! I REALLY LIKE how you introduced the gay stuff with "everyone should try stuff once," bit. That's a great transition. Very believable.
7. "he was an inspiration to a guy like me who did not really ahve an intelligence ni the artistic world of speaking" makes no sense and sounds like the author's artistic intelligence was lacking. fix it.
8. WOAH. NO YOU DID NOT. "something he needed to hear bt I did not no what to say at all" come on kid, it's KNOW, not NO. I'll suppose this was a typo, though. =3
9. WOAH AGAIN. "I like you to," should be TOO. As in ALSO.
10. I think the "blowing a kiss" part is a little over done for someone who just turned gay. he's stil masculine. blowing kisses = little girls, not college guys.
11.Uh oh. "I found it hard to deal with people... understanding there direct intentions." English must not be your first language. When something belongs to a group of people, it's "their" not "there," as in "that place."
12. TO again instead of TOO
13. assholes is one word
14. set foot IN Sweden, not on. you can't squish a country.
15. Capitalize the Catcher in the Rye, it's a book.
16. "Fasten their seatbelts"
17. "Lift off," not "of"
Sorry about all the rude comments, I really did like this. It was very well put together, and it was clean. It's just hard to appreciate a love story when all I can see are huge grammatical errors. Clean it up, and you'll be good to enter in all kinds of contests!
. Rewarded 8
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I agree with Fizbop. Other than that, this story was very touching and very deep. Good job and keep up the good work!
Keep up the good work,
-Brian.. Rewarded 4
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I would love to know more about the friendship between Adam and David. I can't wait to read more of this story. You have an excellent start on it.


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Honestly I feel this was missing the back story. Mainly how they got to know eachother. How they had become great friends, and possibly more. Other then that I really enjoyed it.






