Alas Poor Flora1
Sepulchral shades in sonic glades all ghastly grey and greasy,2
Pulchritudinous plied, and there beside, the frequency of easy,3
Of some the sum and sound of sun, for sure in Echinacea,4
Too foul we feel, the short appeal, of dirty deeds and facia.5
Oh! Thripid thoughts on plants disports, the mighty and the meagre,6
For ferrous fiends and ionic scenes, the quintessence of the eager.7
Phylloxera flock to fair phlox, discordant chords in showers,8
Indicative of the quern and quag, despoil better bowers; 9
Soiree to sway, the mocha may, lyophilize the lignum, 10
Swayingly square the squill in squads… though somewhat infra dignum!11
Trees in the breeze free pollen seas, cupressaceous or oft pine;12
And angiosperms on many therms, quiescent and sublime!13
Khaki parkies lift leaf litter, falls to them to fare so,14
Indeed the need, to feed and weed, fulfils the goad to grow slow.15
Neodymium tints in gentle hints, chatoyant in its paua,16
Glissading o’er the sward and board, toccata into sour.17
With many thanks to Musestalker, the instigator.18
What did you think? Please comment!
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I went hunting for a gem and discovered one of the cleverest pieces of writing I have ever read. This is a classic piece from a brilliant wordsmith at the top of his game. What we need now is to covert it in to a type of G&S patter song and give it an unsuspecting singer as a form of blood sport.
David
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Lol! This is a great piece! It reminds me of Supercalifragelisticexpialodocius. Or... Super-Caliber-Frag-Balistics-and-Especialy-Explosives. Eitherway, bizzarely funny and well writen!
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this is babbling and brilliant.i agree that it the assonance that makes it so intriguing.i love the words and i like the way they seem to say nothing but in the midst of it all it makes sense.this is a truly high degree of creativity.
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This was delightful! I'm not sure what you said, but just the sounds of it all gave me enough mental gymnastics to last the rest of the week! Good job - thanks for entering.
Moses -
This is a pleasure to read and marvel at, I salute you.
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*goes cross eyed* This was great!! Oh my, the acrostic was too funny! However, I think I knew every other word, if that. Where's my dictionary? Where's my thesaurus? Great, great write, it made me laugh. Good luck in the contest.
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I got the gist (but just the gist - some bits I missed). At first, it seems there is no gist, but it exists amidst the mist - 'twas mixed up twixt the schist and grist. Caused some fits with clever twist?
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I saw this last night but was too tired to roll up my shirtsleeves and dig into the dictionary.... and haven't got the time now, so I'll be back to figure it out later LOL! I enjoy the challenge hehehehe.
Just wanted to say good luck in the contest, this seems to me to be a winner.
Kyla X
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Can't understand why you've posted this ina contest for pedantic double talk. It makes perfect sense to me. Especially the khaki parkies lifting leaf litter. They haven't been doing a lot of that around here recently, must be the cooncil (sic) cutbacks. Naughty hidden acrostic. Interesting how different people have interpreted this contest in their own ways. I think your bucolic bombast of sylvan snotter deserves first place. Here, wait a minute, shouldn't it be angiosperms? Or should it be angioplasts instead? Keep up the good work.
I believe it was Rabbie Burns who wrote
Oh wert though in the cauld blast
On yonder lea, on yonder lea
I'd recommend an angioplast
And cup of tea, and cup of tea
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absolutely hilarious
See....I knew you could do this one up proud.
It may be "all sound and fury, signifying nothing", still I adore it for the sound. And, in places - even in a spot or two - you made me laugh, which of course is always my favorite medicine. You rock, my bud...you totally rock.
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deer mista cilla car,
dat wuz rele gud.
than kue 4 shearing
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You have to love that- 'tis brilliant!
David
PS for those who may not realise it, this poem is in english
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But the ACROSTIC was tasteless indeed!
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You said nothing with a plethora of bombasity. Very entertaining.
Jen -
That’s great – the contest called for sesquipedalian logorrhoea and verbosity - I thought I had underdone it… lol.
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Thanks very much but this is where the contest is… so I don’t have that choice.
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spot on
Such a good poem you have written
Perhaps too many big words
Or I have just too little a vocabulary
Though it gives me good excuse to grab my dictionary.
Original and much enjoyed.
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this is great- but you should really post it as a poem on www.allpoetry.com instead of here.
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