"Wake up mom!! I'm gonna be late for school."1
Wearily I open my eyes. My son standing above me. The light from the window seems to illuminate him like he's an angel. Such a handsome young man he has become.2
"OK, I'm awake. What time is it anyway? Where is your father?"3
"Its 6:30 ma. Dad had to work early today, remember? He left before I got up."4
"6:30!? My God. I'm sorry I overslept honey. Your dad must have snuck out this morning. I didn't even hear him get up. Did you eat yet?"5
"No, I thought maybe you could whip up some breakfast fast."6
"Of course you did. OK, Ill be down in a sec."7
As my son walks out of the bedroom I smile. Such a good boy. I mean how many 15 year old boys get up on their own for school? When I was his age my mother had to practically use a bullhorn just to get me to roll over.8
I go downstairs to make him an omelet. I'm still amazed by the new house. So big, and bright. Sometimes its almost like a dream.9
"All right, get your stuff and get in the car Kev."10
"OK, I'm coming ma."11
It's a gorgeous summer day and the drive to school is fast. The grass is so green and lush in this neighborhood. The trees are so full and alive looking. I'm so glad we moved here last year. This area is much better then the last. I feel so much more alive here.12
"Alright Kevin. Have a good day. Ill pick you up at 3:30."13
"See ya mom."14
I watch him run into the school building and once again think how lucky I am. I know God has truly blessed me. I have the most wonderful, hardworking husband and the best son. I couldn't ask for more.15
"This patient here is an interesting one, Dr. Solo. She came to us about 7 years ago. She is severely delusional, brought on by acute shock."16
"Acute shock. What happened?"17
"Her husband apparently tied her to a chair one night He then slit her sons throat, then shot himself in the head in front of her. The police found her still tied to the chair, about two days later according to the coroners report. Still no motive or reason to explain why the husband went crazy. She was completely uncommunicative to their questions and has been for 7 years now. The only way I know whats going on in her head is she acts out the same scene every day. Her son wakes her up and she takes him to school."18
"I think this would be a good study case. Out of all of the institutions Ive visited, this case is the most interesting. Its quite amazing watching her."19
"Why is that Dr.?"20
"Someone that is so sad, that looks so happy. Lost forever in one single day. The human brain is really quite mysterious. She will make a very good addition for my book."21
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Good.
Like everyone else has said, the beginning was great, and really pulled me in. Your transitions were good, and it was easy to read. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Good
The beginning was awesome. I was sucked in. Good Job!beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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Thank you very much. I appreciate that alot. I will return the favor soon.
Despair
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WOW I really like this story! It had such a great beginning and then in the end you never think how sad it will turn out when her life is so peaceful. People take like for granted and you brought out the theme for everybody to understand life is to precious to waste. Good work!
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Thank you so much for the comment. I really appreciate it. I am glad that you took the time to read this. Sorry it took me so long getting back to you. I was out of town for a while. I will return the favor and read some of yours.
Despair
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Oh god, that's absolutely horrible. Not the story, that itself as fantastic. But that doctor. Making complete oblivion of the tattered shards of someone's life.
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Thank you much!! I appreciate the kind remarks
Despair
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This was amazing! It's so sad, yet not. Great twist at the end! Great job!
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Thank you very much. I just thought it was a good idea for a contest .
Despair
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Wow.All I can say is wow.This was a very interesting story.I wasn't expecting this at all.Great job and good luck in my contest.
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Thank you much. I try yet sometimes I fall short. Maybe I didnt fall as far this time around!
Despair
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Thank you so much nikki. I appreciate the kind review!!
Despair
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i loved it! oh my goodness, that was great. i was in total shock when it ended that way. amazing
keep up the great work!
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A very sad story and it has an interesting twist. The human mind is indeed a complex network and we've only just scatched the surface of understanding it. Nicely done.
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Thank you very much Patricia. I appreciate it.
Despair
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Interesting, to say the least. You have a good imagination. Quite sad. Patricia
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