Tides of Love ( Adult Material)

Moonbeams shimmered their lucent light over the outstretched ocean. Tides moved swiftly toward the beach, creating a soothing coo of nature's sweet melodies. It was so beautiful; Motivating me to walk alongside the greatest symbol of eternal love. I soaked up every second I could while I was in its company. There was a gentle breeze that caressed my face. It felt as though love truly did exist in this cruel, unforgiving world of ours. There was a chill of satisfaction that embraced my mortal being. The atmosphere gave me a certain tranquility that I had never once before felt in my entire life. Oh yes, this is what I lived for. 1

Closing my eyes, I felt as though I was one with the wind, one with the water, one with the darkness. As my feet moved freely through the soft beaded sand, water instantly rushed to kiss my ivory skin. Up to my shins in delight, the coolness of the watery touch allowed my dreams to run frantic through reality. This is one of those dreams. 2

Before me, a dark figure sat upon a boulder. It looked out into the ocean, lost in the tides' never ending waves. There was I, walking up toward the stranger unknowing of the many possibilities that could occur. Upon hearing my footsteps, the shadow turned to look at me,as curiosity ran through it's veins as it did mine. The closer I became to this shadow, the more of a man it appeared to be. His muscular body became more defined with every step that I took. Soon, his cool greyish-blue eyes and the peachy colored skin were soon unveiled from my eyes. 3

A warm sensation ran throughout my body. My mind tingled with the slightest idea of actually knowing this person. I only wondered from where. His gentleness was spilling out from his eyes when he gazed into my own. He knew me. He knew not only my mind and my heart, but he also knew my soul. An instant connection shot out like a lazer to one another, making love well up inside of me. He felt it too. I knew he did because he rose from the boulder and called out my name ever so sweetly. It was a wisper to my ears but a shout to my heart. I ran to him, now knowing who this dreamy creature was. 4

I kissed him. A magnet has drawn the passion from both sides into this festering meshpot of wild emotions. Salty tears slithered down my face. I felt my heart giving in willingly to my long-lost lover. His embrace grew tighter with each moment that passed by. It was as if I would fly away with even the smallest breeze. I also wrapped my arms around his large body firmly. Doubt filled my mind. I couldn't believe what was really happening. At this point, there was no such thing as time. There was no such thing as the present place. And, there was no such thing as tension. There was only the two of us and that's how I hoped it would stay for all eternity. 5

He grabbed the zipper that held my dress together and pulled it down to reveal my back in its entirety. He slightly grazed my skin with his smooth fingers. Shivers snuck up my back with every electrical touch he gave to me. A sigh of relief rolled off of my tongue. It was good to finally be in his arms again. He began kissing my neck and down toward my collar bone. While grabbing the top of the dress, he looked into my eyes; questioning his own movements by my standards. I looked back into his, rhetorically questioning his somewhat questioned expression. He grinned and continued sliding my garment off my body.6

As the dress fell to the floor, I felt free. I was finally able to be free of all confines with the person that I so tenderly loved. Soon after, his garments were also on the sandbed and it was just us, with no veil to cover any so called blemish that we might have. 7

Feeling the heat coming off eachother's body and merging into the meshpot between us, we kissed intently. Whatever our lips touched, we kissed with a passion that was only grown by the love that we had for eachother. Our love touch became harsh grasps that only proved that our growing love was becoming too much to handle with only kisses and the gentle entwines of eachother's arms. 8

He threw me down upon the ground. His hot, steaming body was on top of me, which made it known that he wanted me. All of me. His firm manhood was pressing up against the entryway to the greatest form of ecstasy known to all lovers. Without much hesitation, he slid through the door and ventured through the great halls of pleasure. In. Out. In. Out. In. Out. Slow. Fast. Slow. Fast. The beats of love became the rhythm to our love making. Moans escaped from our mouths, allowing the preassure of such ecstasy to be released. 9

Sweat formed and was smeared all over eachother's body. It was like an oil that was carefully massaged into our skin. The climax was near. We both felt our pulse rise and our moans fast and high pitched. Screams of shear bliss fell upon my lover's ear. He turned to look at me. Even though a tired look was written all over his face, he was sure to smile affectionately into my eyes. I smiled too; also very tired. At its peak, moans and screams were frantic and wild. In. Out. In. Out. He rapidly slipped through me, his companion, with ease. The juices that flowed from my body were all over his stomach. The peak was breeched. We both screamed out of fatigue and complete satisfaction. 10

Eventually, he pulled out of me, allowing the elasticity of my womanhood to return. He lied there next to me. I could feel our hearts beat as one as we held eachother peacefully. I loved him. He loved me. There was no questions about that. 11

He held up my left hand and noticed a glowing ring adorning my ring finger. A beautiful stone, made of the purest emerald was placed in the center. He gave me a suprised look. I gazed deeply into his eyes and told him that I just couldn't bear to take the ring off. He was so happy to hear of my loyalty. My sincerity to our life-long commitment. 12

Naked, we sat there next to that boulder watching the tides roll in and the sun rising. The sky turned an amazing hue of red and purple. As the sun began showing itself to the world once again, I noticed my husband fading away. I screamed. I screamed out of pure longing for our eternal happiness together. He sat there; still smiling at me with those gleaming eyes of his. I wept miserabley. I begged him not to leave but instead, he gave me a kiss and told me that I would see him very soon. With that said, he completely disappeared along with the darkness. 13

Sulking in my depression hours afterward, I put the ring into a bottle that I found lying on the beach and sent it out into the sea. I watched it for awhile. It floated out to be with my lover; out to be apart of that eternal love.

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  • callthexylophone
    March 5, 2008

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    I loved the descriptions, it was pretty well written (make sure you know the difference between "it's" and "its", but I have to be honest- when I read "Without much hesitation, he slid through the door and ventured through the great halls of pleasure" I couldn't take it seriously anymore, I chuckled. Still, good job and good luck in my contest!


  • Kat222
    March 4, 2008

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    this was really good. you did erotica in a way few people have done on here. very good. good lick in the contest.

  • himan
    February 23, 2008
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    good

    lol wow not bad


  • GrimDeath
    February 20, 2008
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    I liked it alot, well written. Its full of love but sadness at the same time its wonderful.


  • B Chandler Greeters member
    February 16, 2008

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    Commentary Critique

    In paragraph one, I think that if you was to say 'SHINED' instead of shimmered

    Paragraph three:
    line 3: needs a space between 'ME' & 'AS'; ITS veins....not the contraction

    line 6: needs to spell 'GRAYISH'

    Paragraph four:
    Warm sensations ran throughout my body (LINE ONE)

    An instant connection shot out like a laser to one another, making love well up inside of me. (LINE NINE)

    It was a whisper to my ears but a shout to my hear (LINE ELEVEN)

    Paragraph five:
    Line two: mesh pot

    Paragraph seven: Line three...SAND BED

    Paragraphs eight - eleven: needs separation in spelling, grammatical fixes

    Feeling the heat coming off each other's body and merging into the mesh pot between us, we kissed intently. Whatever our lips touched, we kissed with a passion that was only grown by the love that we had for each other. Our love touch became harsh grasps that only proved that our growing love was becoming too much to handle with only kisses and the gentle entwines of each other's arms.

    He threw me down upon the ground. His hot, steaming body was on top of me, which made it known that he wanted me...all of me. His firm manhood was pressing up against the entryway to the greatest form of ecstasy known to all lovers. Without much hesitation, he slid through the door and ventured through the great halls of pleasure. In. Out. In. Out. In. Out. Slow. Fast. Slow. Fast. The beats of love became the rhythm to our love making. Moans escaped from our mouths, allowing the pressure of such ecstasy to be released.

    Sweat formed and was smeared all over each other’s body. It was like oil that was carefully massaged into our skin. The climax was near. We both felt our pulse rise and our moans fast and high pitched. Screams of shear bliss fell upon my lover's ear. He turned to look at me. Even though a tired look was written all over his face, he was sure to smile affectionately into my eyes. I smiled too; also very tired. At its peak, moans and screams were frantic and wild. In. Out. In. Out. He rapidly slipped through me, his companion, with ease. The juices that flowed from my body were all over his stomach. The peak was breeched. We both screamed out of fatigue and complete satisfaction. 10

    Eventually, he pulled out of me, allowing the elasticity of my womanhood to return. He lied there next to me. I could feel our hearts beat as one as we held each other peacefully. I loved him. He loved me. There were no questions about that. 11


    Paragraphs 12 and 13: minor sentence fragments, grammatical spelling

    He held up my left hand and noticed a glowing ring adorning my ring finger. A beautiful stone, made of the purest emerald was placed in the center. He gave me a surprised look. I gazed deeply into his eyes and told him that I just couldn't bear to take the ring off. He was so happy to hear of my loyalty- my sincerity to our life-long commitment. 12

    Naked, we sat there next to that boulder watching the tides roll in and the sun was rising. The sky turned an amazing hue of red and purple. As the sun began showing itself to the world once again, I noticed my husband fading away. I screamed. I screamed out of pure longing for our eternal happiness together. He sat there; still smiling at me with those gleaming eyes of his. I wept miserably. I begged him not to leave but instead, he gave me a kiss and told me that I would see him very soon. With that said, he completely disappeared along with the darkness. 13


    Don't get me wrong but I think if you were to take the time out to re-check the errors in corrections, you'll get a bigger imagery scene out of your writes. All the critiques made have their corrected lines fixed.


  • Kat222
    February 8, 2008
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    amazing story! i enjoyed it very much.


  • finding myself 84
    February 6, 2008

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    This was a very amazing write, the ending was heart wrenching but I absolutely loved reading it. WONDERFUL WORK!!!


  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    February 5, 2008

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    Wow! I am not kidding when I say that left me speechless. The words you used and the way that was written was amazing. I could really get a sense of all the emotions in it. Beautiful and sad all at once. I truly loved this one!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

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